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Étant donné mon niveau d'Anglais, je poste mon devoir sur ce site dans le but que quelqu'un m'indique mes éventuelles erreurs dans ce DM.
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" Big cities need tall tower as far as companies need good logos "
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Mon DM commence ici:
My opinion is enough varied: I’m agree, and don’t agree with this sentence for some reasons.
On the one hand I’m agree with this statement for one main reason. We can talk about the example of the tower of Dubaï: Burj Khalifa. Certainly, this city is the capital of Arabia but a lot of people knew this city despite is icon: the tower which is the tallest construction all over the world. Indeed, a construction tower is a good way to make famous a city. Besides, make a big construction is the best way to show the power and the wealth of a country, actually, this is a form of power.
On the other hand, I’m don’t agree with this statement because a huge number of companies have a good logo and, I’m positive that much companies are not famous despite the originality of them logos.
This sentence is wrong in part. We can’t relied the tall tower and the good logos for companies because a logo is not a form of power, with a logo we can’t show the wealth and the power of a country. Moreover, the logo doesn’t make the fame.
Merci d'avoir lu jusqu'ici,
Cordialement.
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Voila une breve correction grammaticale. Je te conseil néammoins de mieux organiser tes éléments et de faire une synthèse... Tu as fait un plan thèse/anti-these (d'accord, pas d'accord) mais a la fin , il te faut une conclusion avec une réponse (on appelle ca une ouverture) du genre " ce dont on vraiment besoin les villes c'est ....... plutôt que des gratte-ciels"
My opinion is enough("= mostly" enough c'est "suffisament") varied: I agree (c'est un verbe), and don’t agree with this sentence(c'est plus une "assertion" que une "sentence") for some reasons.
On (rien) one hand I agree (c'est un verbe) with this statement for one main reason. We can talk about the example of the tower(="Skyline " et ca fait plus classe ;) ) of Dubaï: Burj Khalifa. Certainly, this city is the capital of Arabia(="United Arab Emirates") but a lot of people knew this city despite is(=its) icon: the tower which is the tallest construction all over the world. Indeed, a construction tower is a good way to make famous a city. Besides, make a big construction is the best way to show the power and the wealth of a country, actually, this is a form of power.
On the other hand, I don’t agree (c'est un verbe) with this statement because a huge number of companies have a good logo and, I’m positive(=sure?) that much(=many) companies are not famous despite the originality of them logos.
This sentence is wrong in part. We can’t relied(="compare" ou "link" attention c'est a l'infinitif) the tall tower and the good logos for companies because a logo is not a form of power, with a logo we(en anglais c'est plutôt "you" dans ce cas) can’t show the wealth and the power of a country. Moreover, the logo doesn’t make the fame.