Phrases en anglais

Publié le 1 oct. 2016 il y a 7A par Anonyme - Fin › 3 oct. 2016 dans 7A
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Bonjour, j'ai rédigé le texte suivant en anglais, pourriez-vous m'aider à repérer mes erreurs? De plus, il doit être écrit au présent.

Merci beaucoup...

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

MON TEXTE :

 

The extract of the episode of Desesperate Housewives deals with a woman called Gabrielle Solis, or Gaby. This woman is very lonely, because her husband is hardworkind, and often leaves the house for work. She is trying to make friends, especially by oragnizing a game of poket at her home. The problem is that she is too selfush, she only takes about herself and seems to despise the other women.

In my opinion, I don't thiknk she is a bad person and she is might be doing that only because she doesn't know how to deal with people, she only wishes to make friends but doesn't know how to do; this is the most likely reason for me.

 

If I had to give advice to the newcomers, I shall advise to them not to be late, to respect their teachers, not ot eat chewing-gum in class, and particulary to try to work.




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Anonyme
Posté le 1 oct. 2016

J'ai mis toutes les corrections en gras, pour mieux les distinguer. C'est vraiment bien, peu de fautes vraiment, mais si j'ai changé quelques mots, c'est pour un meilleur choix de mot, plus riche et "sophistiqué".

The excerpt of the episode of Desperate Housewives involves a woman called Gabrielle Solis, also known as Gaby. This woman is very lonely and friendless, because her husband is working late at night, and is rarely at home. She is trying to make friends, for example by organizing a game of poker at her house. The problem is that she is too selfish : she only thinks about herself and seems to despise the other women.

I don't think she is a bad person. She might be doing that only because she doesn't know how to deal with people. She only wishes to make friends but doesn't know handle it.

If I had to give advice to the newcomers, I would advise them not to be late, to show respect to their teachers, not to eat chewing-gum in class, and particularly work hard.

 


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