correction Anglais

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Gigi88
Publié le 6 mars 2012 il y a 2A Fin › 13 mars 2012 2A
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SUJET DU DEVOIR

Bonjour voila j ai une redaction a faire . j e l ai fait . Mais je ne suis pas for en Anglais .
J ai besoin de quelqu un qui soit fort en Anglais . J ai fait mon travail mais pour quelque phrases j ai utiliser un traducteur. pouvez vous me corriger svp . Merci d'avance !!

Voila en français:

J ai déjà allée au Maroc, en Espagne, en Allemagne, à Dubaï, et en Belgique.

Je suis allée au Maroc plusieurs fois depuis mon enfance, je suis allée a Rabat chez ma famille. J ai visité le musée des Oudayas. Ce musée a été créé au début du Protectorat, le musée des Oudayas a pour cadre l'ancienne demeure de Moulay Ismaïl à Rabat, construite à la fin du XVIIe siècle. Le musée contient des arts traditionnels marocains qui exposent des bijoux, des poteries, des costumes et surtout de superbes Coran enluminés vieux de plusieurs siècles. On y trouve également une impressionnante collection de tapis, une des spécialités de Rabat. J’ai aussi visité la Tour Hassan à Rabat. La Tour Hassan est le monument le plus célèbre de Rabat, et un lieu de passage où plein de gens touristes qui veulent découvrir la capitale du royaume. Je suis allée a la plage , piscine et dans le Souk.

Au Maroc, je suis allée à Marrakech, j ai visité le Jardin Majorelle. C’est une magnifique villa et son jardin subtropical construits en 1923 par le peintre français Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Célèbre pour son bleu si particulier, le bleu Majorelle, la villa est entourée par un jardin où vivent de nombreuses variétés d'arbres et de plantes. Les palmiers, bougainvilliers et cactus se mêlent aux bananiers, lauriers… La végétation est luxuriante, les couleurs sont magnifiques !

Au Maroc, je suis allée à Fès, Oujda, Tanger et Casablanca.

Je suis allée en Espagne en 2011 avec mes parents, je suis allée chez des amies à mes parents à Almeria. Il fait très chaud. C’est très beau.

Je suis allée en Allemagne en 2009 à Francfort, c’était bien. Mais sinon je vais en Allemagne tout le temps pour me promener !!!

En 2010, je suis allée à Dubaï avec ma sœur chez mon oncle. Il fait très très chaud. C’est trop beau. J’ai passé de bonne Vacances là-bas. Je suis resté 2 semaines. C’est passé trop vite. Dans les restaurants à Dubaï, les cuisiniers sont très généreux, les assiettes sont pleines ont arrive pas à les finir. Il y a des grattes-ciel , la plus grande tour mesure 825m. Il y a plein de touriste.

En 2007 je suis allée en Belgique avec ma famille. Nous sommes allées à Bruxelle. Mais je m en souviens pas trop, sa fait longtemps.
En Anglais:

I have already gone to Morocco, Spain, Germany, Dubai and Belgium.
I went to Morocco several times since my childhood, I went with my family in Rabat. J have visited the museum Oudayas. This museum was established at the beginning of the Protectorate, the museum is set in Oudayas the former residence of Moulay Ismail in Rabat, built in the late seventeenth century. The museum contains traditional Moroccan arts exhibiting jewelry, pottery, costumes, and especially great Quran illuminated centuries old. There is also an impressive collection of carpets, a specialty of Rabat. I also visited the Hassan Tower in Rabat. Hassan Tower is the most famous monument of Rabat, and a crossing point where lots of people who want to discover the tourist capital of the kingdom. I went to the beach, pool and in the Souk.
In Morocco, I went to Marrakech, I have visited the Jardin Majorelle. This is a beautiful villa and its subtropical garden built in 1923 by the French painter Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Famous for its peculiar blue, blue Majorelle, the villa is surrounded by a garden where many varieties of trees and plants. The palm trees, bougainvillea and cactus mix with bananas, laurels? The vegetation is lush, the colors are beautiful!
In Morocco, I went to Fez, Oujda, Tangier and Casablanca.
I went to Spain in 2011 with my parents, I went to some friends of my parents in Almeria. It is very hot. It's beautiful.
I went to Germany in 2009 in Frankfurt, it was good. But if I go to Germany all the time for a walk!
In 2010, I went to Dubai with my sister at my uncle. It's very very hot. This is too good. I had a good holiday there. I stayed two weeks. It happened too fast. In restaurants in Dubai, the cooks are very generous, the plates are full are unable to finish them. There are skyscrapers, the tallest measuring 825 m. There are lots of tourists.
In 2007 I went to Belgium with my family. We went to Brussel. But I m ​​not remember it too, its been a long time.

OÙ J'EN SUIS DANS MON DEVOIR

Bonjour voila j ai une redaction a faire . j e l ai fait . Mais je ne suis pas for en Anglais .
J ai besoin de quelqu un qui soit fort en Anglais . J ai fait mon travail mais pour quelque phrases j ai utiliser un traducteur. pouvez vous me corriger svp . Merci d'avance !!

Voila en français:

J ai déjà allée au Maroc, en Espagne, en Allemagne, à Dubaï, et en Belgique.

Je suis allée au Maroc plusieurs fois depuis mon enfance, je suis allée a Rabat chez ma famille. J ai visité le musée des Oudayas. Ce musée a été créé au début du Protectorat, le musée des Oudayas a pour cadre l'ancienne demeure de Moulay Ismaïl à Rabat, construite à la fin du XVIIe siècle. Le musée contient des arts traditionnels marocains qui exposent des bijoux, des poteries, des costumes et surtout de superbes Coran enluminés vieux de plusieurs siècles. On y trouve également une impressionnante collection de tapis, une des spécialités de Rabat. J’ai aussi visité la Tour Hassan à Rabat. La Tour Hassan est le monument le plus célèbre de Rabat, et un lieu de passage où plein de gens touristes qui veulent découvrir la capitale du royaume. Je suis allée a la plage , piscine et dans le Souk.

Au Maroc, je suis allée à Marrakech, j ai visité le Jardin Majorelle. C’est une magnifique villa et son jardin subtropical construits en 1923 par le peintre français Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Célèbre pour son bleu si particulier, le bleu Majorelle, la villa est entourée par un jardin où vivent de nombreuses variétés d'arbres et de plantes. Les palmiers, bougainvilliers et cactus se mêlent aux bananiers, lauriers… La végétation est luxuriante, les couleurs sont magnifiques !

Au Maroc, je suis allée à Fès, Oujda, Tanger et Casablanca.

Je suis allée en Espagne en 2011 avec mes parents, je suis allée chez des amies à mes parents à Almeria. Il fait très chaud. C’est très beau.

Je suis allée en Allemagne en 2009 à Francfort, c’était bien. Mais sinon je vais en Allemagne tout le temps pour me promener !!!

En 2010, je suis allée à Dubaï avec ma sœur chez mon oncle. Il fait très très chaud. C’est trop beau. J’ai passé de bonne Vacances là-bas. Je suis resté 2 semaines. C’est passé trop vite. Dans les restaurants à Dubaï, les cuisiniers sont très généreux, les assiettes sont pleines ont arrive pas à les finir. Il y a des grattes-ciel , la plus grande tour mesure 825m. Il y a plein de touriste.

En 2007 je suis allée en Belgique avec ma famille. Nous sommes allées à Bruxelle. Mais je m en souviens pas trop, sa fait longtemps.
En Anglais:

I have already gone to Morocco, Spain, Germany, Dubai and Belgium.
I went to Morocco several times since my childhood, I went with my family in Rabat. J have visited the museum Oudayas. This museum was established at the beginning of the Protectorate, the museum is set in Oudayas the former residence of Moulay Ismail in Rabat, built in the late seventeenth century. The museum contains traditional Moroccan arts exhibiting jewelry, pottery, costumes, and especially great Quran illuminated centuries old. There is also an impressive collection of carpets, a specialty of Rabat. I also visited the Hassan Tower in Rabat. Hassan Tower is the most famous monument of Rabat, and a crossing point where lots of people who want to discover the tourist capital of the kingdom. I went to the beach, pool and in the Souk.
In Morocco, I went to Marrakech, I have visited the Jardin Majorelle. This is a beautiful villa and its subtropical garden built in 1923 by the French painter Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Famous for its peculiar blue, blue Majorelle, the villa is surrounded by a garden where many varieties of trees and plants. The palm trees, bougainvillea and cactus mix with bananas, laurels? The vegetation is lush, the colors are beautiful!
In Morocco, I went to Fez, Oujda, Tangier and Casablanca.
I went to Spain in 2011 with my parents, I went to some friends of my parents in Almeria. It is very hot. It's beautiful.
I went to Germany in 2009 in Frankfurt, it was good. But if I go to Germany all the time for a walk!
In 2010, I went to Dubai with my sister at my uncle. It's very very hot. This is too good. I had a good holiday there. I stayed two weeks. It happened too fast. In restaurants in Dubai, the cooks are very generous, the plates are full are unable to finish them. There are skyscrapers, the tallest measuring 825 m. There are lots of tourists.
In 2007 I went to Belgium with my family. We went to Brussel. But I m ​​not remember it too, its been a long time.

4 commentaires pour le devoir correction Anglais

karolinete
karolinete
2A
Hey! Voici ton devoir corrigé! C'est pas mal du tout!
J'espère que ça te convient, et que tu aura une bonne note!
Bise. :)

I have BEEN to Morocco, Spain, Germany, Dubai and Belgium.
I went to Morocco several times since my childhood, I went with my family in Rabat. THERE, I visited the museum Oudayas. This museum was established at the beginning of the Protectorate, the museum is set in Oudayas the former residence of Moulay Ismail in Rabat, built in the late seventeenth century. The museum contains traditional Moroccan arts exhibiting jewelry, pottery, costumes, and especially great Quran illuminated centuries old. There is also an impressive collection of carpets, a specialty of Rabat. I also visited the Hassan Tower in Rabat. Hassan Tower is the most famous monument of Rabat, and a crossing point FOR lots of people who want to discover the tourist capital of the kingdom. I went to the beach, pool and in the Souk.
In Morocco, I went to Marrakech, I visited the Jardin Majorelle. This is a beautiful villa SURROUNDED BY A subtropical garden built in 1923 by the French painter Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Famous for its peculiar blue, blue Majorelle, the villa is surrounded by a garden where many varieties of trees and plants. The palm trees, bougainvillea and cactus mix with bananas, laurels? The vegetation is lush, the colors are beautiful!
In Morocco, I went to Fez, Oujda, Tangier and Casablanca.
I went to Spain in 2011 with my parents, I VISITED some friends of my parents in Almeria. It is very hot. It's beautiful.
I went to Germany in 2009 in Frankfurt, it was NICE. But if I go to Germany all the time for a walk! (CA VEUT DIRE QUOI CA?! ^^)
In 2010, I went to Dubai with my sister at my uncle'S. It's very very hot THERE. IT WAS SO NICE. I had a good TRIP there. I stayed FOR two weeks. It WENT BY too fast. In restaurants in Dubai, the cooks are very generous, the plates are full AND WE WERE unable to finish them. There are skyscrapers, the tallest measuring 825 m. There are lots of tourists.
In 2007 I went to Belgium with my family. We went to Brussel. But I CAN'T REMEMBER IT THAT WELL BECAUSE IT WAS A LONG TIME AGO.



karolinete
karolinete
2A
Hey! Voici ton devoir corrigé! C'est pas mal du tout!
J'espère que ça te convient, et que tu aura une bonne note!
Bise. :)

I have BEEN to Morocco, Spain, Germany, Dubai and Belgium.
I went to Morocco several times since my childhood, I went with my family in Rabat. THERE, I visited the museum Oudayas. This museum was established at the beginning of the Protectorate, the museum is set in Oudayas the former residence of Moulay Ismail in Rabat, built in the late seventeenth century. The museum contains traditional Moroccan arts exhibiting jewelry, pottery, costumes, and especially great Quran illuminated centuries old. There is also an impressive collection of carpets, a specialty of Rabat. I also visited the Hassan Tower in Rabat. Hassan Tower is the most famous monument of Rabat, and a crossing point FOR lots of people who want to discover the tourist capital of the kingdom. I went to the beach, pool and in the Souk.
In Morocco, I went to Marrakech, I visited the Jardin Majorelle. This is a beautiful villa SURROUNDED BY A subtropical garden built in 1923 by the French painter Jacques Majorelle (1888-1962). Famous for its peculiar blue, blue Majorelle, the villa is surrounded by a garden where many varieties of trees and plants. The palm trees, bougainvillea and cactus mix with bananas, laurels? The vegetation is lush, the colors are beautiful!
In Morocco, I went to Fez, Oujda, Tangier and Casablanca.
I went to Spain in 2011 with my parents, I VISITED some friends of my parents in Almeria. It is very hot. It's beautiful.
I went to Germany in 2009 in Frankfurt, it was NICE. But if I go to Germany all the time for a walk! (CA VEUT DIRE QUOI CA?! ^^)
In 2010, I went to Dubai with my sister at my uncle'S. It's very very hot THERE. IT WAS SO NICE. I had a good TRIP there. I stayed FOR two weeks. It WENT BY too fast. In restaurants in Dubai, the cooks are very generous, the plates are full AND WE WERE unable to finish them. There are skyscrapers, the tallest measuring 825 m. There are lots of tourists.
In 2007 I went to Belgium with my family. We went to Brussel. But I CAN'T REMEMBER IT THAT WELL BECAUSE IT WAS A LONG TIME AGO.



Gigi88
Gigi88
2A
But if I go to Germany all the time for a walk! (CA VEUT DIRE QUOI CA?! ^^)


Je voulais dire : mais je vais en allemagne souvent pour me promener .

vagnias
vagnias
2A
If i go to germany all the time for a work ne veut pas dire que " je vais en allemagne souvent pour me promner MAIS Si je vais en Allemagne tout le temps pour un travail :s je crois pas que ca est vraiment un sens mais sinon tu pourra ecrire I often go to germany for strolling .
Il est tres interressant ton texte :) Bon courage !!