Créer un super héro

Créer un super héro

Publié le 5 janv. 2012 il y a 2A par Vanelou - Fin › 7 janv. 2012 dans 2A
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Sujet du devoir

Je dois créer un super héro, le décrire dans sa vie de tous les jours et quand il devient super héro, je dois dire ses pouvoirs ainsi que comment il a fait pour devenir super héro. J'ai fais un texte pouvez vous me le corriger ? (quand j'ai expliquer comment elle est devenu super héro je pense que j'ai écris du chinois.. je voulais dire qu'un accident la plongé dans un coma artificiel , on l'a mit dans une machine qui fait des rayons , et quand elle sait reveillé elle avait des pouvoirs sur développé

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Hello everybody, i'm going to speak about my superhero. She is a woman, her name is The Warrior. She is tall, muscular and strong. She has got blond hair and blue eyes. She wear purple skintight with a blue logo who wear the letter "W". She has an armour, which makes her invincible. The Warrior has superpowers : she reads people's minds, foresee the futur. She can't fly because she doesn't has a cap but she can destroy everything because she is very strong. She can't jump very hight but she runs very fast. Her worst enemy il the other is a bad version warrior. In everyday life , the name of my superhero is Eleanor Smith, a common name in England which prove the banality of this girl. Eleanor studies in an university of cambridge. She is shy and she doesn't hesitate to help her classmates, she is beautiful , she has got blond hair and she is tall. An accident plunged Eleanor into an artificial coma, we put she in a machine which made the beam for the resuscitated and gave powers great developed


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fred75019
fred75019
Posté le 6 janv. 2012
Salut ! Je t'ai corrigé les quelques fautes que j'ai trouvé. Si tu vois une lettre ou un mot écrit en majuscules précédé et suivi de _ c'est ma correction. En espérant que ça te rende service. A+

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Hello everybody, I'm going to speak about my superhero. She is a woman, her name is The Warrior. She is tall, muscular and strong. She has got blond hair and blue eyes. She wear_S_ purple _TIGHTS_ with a blue logo _WITH_ the letter "W" _ON IT_. She has an _ARMOR_, which makes her invincible. The Warrior has superpowers : she reads _IN_ people's minds, foresee_S_ the futur_E_. She can't fly because she doesn't _HAVE_(ou _WEAR_ [elle ne porte pas de cape] a cap_E_ but she can destroy everything because she is very strong. She can't jump very high but she runs very fast. Her worst enemy is a bad version warrior. In everyday_'S_ life , the name of my superhero is Eleanor Smith, a common name in England which prove_S_ the banality of this girl. Eleanor studies in an university of _C_ambridge. She is shy and she doesn't hesitate to help her classmates, she is beautiful , she has got blond hair and she is tall. An accident plunged Eleanor into an artificial coma, we put _HER_ in a machine which made the beam for the resuscitated and gave powers great develop_P_ed.

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