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Bonjour à tous je dois écrire un essai (compare/contrast) sur le thème "Influence of books to the influence of music) j'ai déjà commencé quelque chose et l'ai envoyé à mon professeur il m'a dit qu'il n'y avait pas de topic sentence ou de thesis et qu'il ne fallait rien copier d'internet. Il me dit que je n'ai pas écrit selon le style américain mais je suis francaise et je n'y comprend rien! Merci de m'aider je n'en peux plus!

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Influence of music to the influence of books.
We live in an age where our generation needs communication in various ways. It may be through music and books. They both have similarities as well as differences, each has its own advantages or disadvantages. They seem to be two different things but when it comes to young people and their lives, they have a strong influence. Music is a collection of different songs that appeal to the public. They are classified into genres like rock, blues, love songs, classical, etc.. A music piece is composed of the lyrics, which forms part of the song, and the sound which is performed by the band. Books on the other hand are written composition of a writer which can be different genres as well. The stories can be categorized as love stories, comedy, action, drama, sci-fi, mystery and thriller. From the differences, we can see that music and book bring us different feelings and vision.

Music is found in every known culture from the past, it is present in our days, and for sure it will be there in further generations. For many people like singers, musicians, dancers, students, doctors, and common people, music is a way of life. Throughout history music had a deep influence on people. It is for that elsewhere that the Kings, Emperors, Tyrants, Dictators and Government always had resorts to the music. It is so true that today one identifies a nation has an anthem. Music has an influence on everyone who listens to it. It stimulates the brain, and it motivates the soul. Others may think that music is a distraction. Music is a creative form of poetry that involves many different kinds of rhythms, harmonies, and melodies. Music gives you the confidence to do better or to get up off your feet. It puts your mind in a whole new world. It takes you away from the troubles of the real world and puts you in a safe no one can unlock. It appeals to your feelings. If you are feeling sad one day you might want to listen to a sad song like Roxette's “Listen to your heart”. If you are feeling upbeat and excited, you probably would listen to rock or metal. You can listen to "Livin' On A Prayer" by Bon Jovi for inspiration. It is also great to listen to music before a sporting event. For example, you can listen to "Eye Of The Tiger" by Survivor before every game you play. It gets you pumped up. Music is very vital to success. Music is a tool used to penetrate the mind of its beholder. When any problems occur just listen to music to erase all of your pains. Maya Angelou said "Music was my refuge. I could crawl into the space between the notes and curl my back to loneliness."
Others may think that music is a distraction to many. Music is said to have a strong influence on how young impressionable minds live, think and act. But, what people may not know is how music influences the way people think, how they act, and how helpful it can be for them. In this sense, there are many people who criticize some kind of music because of teenagers' problems like violence and drug abuse. On one hand, Rap and Rock n Roll musicians are blamed for showing dark images and thoughts in their videos and lyrics as well. Others feel when you find a great song, you find yourself heavily distracted by singing, or dancing to the song. It is very distracting when it comes to doing school work. Most when listening to music will turn the volume up to the max, distracting them from their work. It takes your thinking cap off and keeps you from progressing further more than needed. Vocals added to the piece make it even worst. When you know the song you typically know the lyrics which again distract you from your tasks.
Music tends to spark emotions from memories of specific situations or times. People oftentimes relate to songs easier than books. Books have a specific storyline, but songs can be interpreted so many different ways.
Certain people admitted to find the courage to persevere in their life or simply in their job that by drawing lessons of energy from books. As we see it, the book is not only an object, but also a rich interlocutor with whom we discuss and, which brings us, very often, something fabulous. It plays the role of a friend who lends us an attentive ear. At any time, the book educates us, shapes us and models us. Much more than other education matters. In Roald Dahl’s book, named Matilda, we find an interesting quote about our feelings while readings books ““The books transported her into new worlds and introduced her to amazing people who lived exciting lives. She went on olden-day sailing ships with Joseph Conrad. She went to Africa with Ernest Hemingway and to India with Rudyard Kipling. She travelled all over the world while sitting in her little room in an English village.” The persons who loves reading think of the pleasure to imagine situations, to feel accompanied. Susan Wiggs said "You're never alone when you're reading a book.” but there are people who think that to read is a waste of time and that it is boring. Reading books makes that our brain works the imagination and the memory, we learn interesting things but if we read many followed hours, our vision gets tired and we shall have problems in contrast of listening to music. Several times, when we read an interesting novel, we plunge into the reading so much that we do not think of the reality. This peculiarity is positive because we can escape from our life, but a little bit negative also because we are not conscious of things and we isolate ourselves. An American study realized by doctor Brian Primack reveals that between the music and reading books for teenagers, the music lovers would may be eight times more depressed than the readers of books, less depressed in the average.
Music is more outgoing; reading is more passive. You can share your passion for music by listening to it or dancing to it with your friends; on the other hand, reading has to be done by your own self. Music can be enjoyed with multiple friends but reading can only be enjoyed by you. Reading gives you time by yourself to reflect and have some quiet time.
Reading is far more educational compared to listening to music. Reading can increase your vocabulary and comprehension ability while music doesn’t. Music is normally repeated over and over. It gets hooked in your brain and distracts you in class. An engaging story can also make you day-dream while the teacher is teaching in class. Teachers will normally encourage their students to read than to have their earphones “glued” to their ears all the time. My teachers once said that having earphones “glued” to your ears all the time cripples you socially because you do not engage in conversations with other people. Nevertheless, playing music and listening to it is two different things. Playing music engages more than the ears, it engages your eyes and your mind; it can also increase your attention.