Fiche notion spaces and exchanges

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To answer this notion, we will speak about of immigration in the United States.
This notion deals with the geographical and symbolic areas that all societies occupy and the interactions between men and different societies. Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces. The different cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have shaped and characterized our modern-day world.
We can ask why did people immigrate to the USA and what are the consequences on the America ?
First we will see that many people immigrate to the USA in particular to achieve the American dream, in second time we see that integration in the USA is not always successful and finally we will see what immigration has brought in the USA.

First, the USA vision is multiple, as shown in the document view in class entitled Dreamland. This document is a cartoon who representing the celebrities, who symbolize the embodiment of American life. For example, we see Uncle Sam who representing the American government, or yet fast food, Marilyn Monroe, Mount Rushmore… It is a vision of the perfect life and encourages people to come in USA. Therefore there are many immigrant who leave their native country to live the American dream, for live their perfect life. Indeed we saw in class a document explaining that a group of mexicans decided to cross the border to achieve the American dream and escape from poverty.

However, they had to cross the border illegally way help by the smuggles. The smugglers are unscrupulous gready criminals who are only interested in making profit. They are not interested in fate of the immigrants. They treat them like cattle. For the smuggles, Mexicans are easy preys. As shown in this document it is not easy to enter the US, and it is not easy to live in USA ,the document Dreamland, does not Reference to poverty and discrimination present in USA .

Finally, this immigration impacts the United States, the immigration of Spanish speaking people in USA to permit the creation of Spanglish. Spanglish is a mix between Spanish and English, and form a new language.

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