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It was one evening on July 17th, 2004, in Berlin I was sitting down on a bench, I was with friends, they discussed and suddenly when I lift my head to look in the sky, I saw thing strange who ressembled a luminous points, it was very strange, this flying object been difficult to identify and had the form of a disc.
I doubted before facing the facts that it was perhaps an UFO. It to cause at home first of all a feeling of fear because I imagined during some instant that they are going to intrude by aliens that to be kidnapped. Then I had a feeling anxiety because I am afraid that them to move me and my Friends ans that they harm us. I asked a lot of
question on this subject. Then I had a feeling of astonishment because it is not every day which is seen the similar things in the sky of Berlin.
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Salut,
À priori, c'est correct sauf pour quelques petits trucs :
Dans la deuxième ligne, tu devrais soit dire :
" I saw a strange thing" et "luminous point", dans ce cas, tout est singulier,
Soit dire : " I saw strange things" et "luminous points" et tout sera au pluriel.
Deuxieme chose :
mets un S à : "some instants"
et ce serait plus correct de dire "I felt anxiety" (je pense)
et plus correct de dire dans cette phrase : "It's because" que "It to cause".
Il manque aussi un S à "question" dans l'avant-dernière ligne.
Sinon, c'est super.