corriger mon texte d'anglais

Publié le 22 févr. 2017 il y a 7A par Anonyme - Fin › 25 févr. 2017 dans 7A
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Bonjour, je dois réaliser en anglais un oral de 2 minutes sur le sujet de l'immigration en Hongrie et en Angleterre. J’ai écrit le texte mais j'ai peur d'avoir laissé passer quelques fautes. J’aimerais que vous me les corrigiez ou me les indiquiez. Merci par avance de votre aide.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

This graphic represents the rate of the asylum applications per 100,000 local populations in 2005. The most affected country is Hungary. In fact Hungary welcomes 1,799 immigrants for 100,000 local populations. That represents 1.799 percent of the populations. It is therefore concluded that the Hungary is the country who welcoming the most immigrants in his country but we note that the UK welcome less people like this. They host approximately 0.06 percent of immigrant for 100,000 local people. That is to say Hungary welcomes 28 times more migrants than United Kingdom. But if we look in the past the United Kingdom is a cosmopolitan country. Firstly United Kingdom is a host country for the migrant because there is less unemployment than in other country, after the migrant don’t need of an identity card. However since the Brexit, the migrant question is over. The United Kingdom doesn’t participate anymore in the exchange and in the commerce after they goes out to the migrant policy of the European Union. it is therefore a ditch bigger and bigger which gets dug in Great Britain between the aspirations nationalist and the aspirations cosmopolitan.




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Anonyme
Posté le 23 févr. 2017

salut voici la correction : !

This graphic represents the rate of the asylum applications per 100,000 local populations in 2005. The most affected country is Hungary. In fact Hungary welcomes 1,799 immigrants for 100,000 local populations. That represents 1.799 percent of the population. It is therefore concluded that the Hungary is the country who welcoming the most immigrants in his country, but we note that the UK welcome less people like this. They host approximately 0.06 percent of immigrant for 100,000 local people. That is to say Hungary welcomes 28 times more migrants than the United Kingdom. But if we look at the past the United Kingdom is a cosmopolitan country. The Firstly United Kingdom is a host country for the migrant because there is less unemployment than in another country, after the migrant don’t need of an identity card. However, since the Brexit, the migrant question is over. The United Kingdom doesn’t participate anymore in the exchange and in the commerce after they goes out to the migrant policy of the European Union. it is therefore a ditch bigger and bigger which gets dug in Great Britain between the aspirations nationalist and the aspirations cosmopolitan.

Ta fait des erreur sur certains verbe et des noms communs/Propre !

 

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