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Publié le 28 nov. 2017 il y a 6A par Anonyme - Fin › 1 déc. 2017 dans 6A
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No we cant Paul is dead we must call the police Just imagine you, in a big house with your family. You will never have to work in your life. I can make you live like a king. I swear You are just manipulating me is not it ? Do you think i am stupid ? No never. I have a lot of money and I can give it to you if you do what I want you to do. So you wants to buy my silent, you cant say the contrary some how, yes But it’s a corpse we cant do that. I call the 911 and we tell them it was an accident we are in the clear What are you saying ? If you call the police we will go to jail. Your so naive Jonny. They will never trust us. Do you understand. No we cant do that Della. It was our friend. Have I tell you that I saw Paul one day at your house with your wife. What ? I dont understand ? what’s your point Oh jonny, your naive but not that bad. Your wife and Jonny alone in your house. They were not playing cards. No, No it’s impossible. They would never do it to me. My friend and my wife ? Impossible Oh you know jonny we never really know someone and even more our loved ones. He betrayed you. You don’t owe him anything. How could they betraye me, I am fed up Oh we don’t have time to depress. Now listen to me carrefully I am listening Take his clothes off and put yours on him Okay. Okay it ‘s understand You see Johnny, we are not really different you and me .

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Merci de me corriger toutes fautes




4 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 28 nov. 2017

Je ne corrige certainement pas toutes tes fautes, mais voici celles que j'ai repéré :

cant -> can't (cant n'est pas anglais)

if you do what I want you to do -> if you do what I want (plus léger)

It was our friend -> He/She was our friend (on parle d'une personne, donc pas de it)

Okay it ‘s understand -> Okay I understand (formulation plus clair)

Anonyme
Posté le 29 nov. 2017

Essayes d´utiliser un correcteur.

Anonyme
Posté le 30 nov. 2017

cant = can't

is not it ? = aren't you ?*

you wants to buy my silent = you want to buy my silence

your so naive = you're

have I tell you = have I told you

I dont understand = I don't understand

they would never do it to me = they would never do that to me

how could they betraye me = betray me

it's undertand = it's understood

 

Il faudrait aussi revoir la ponctuation...

Anonyme
Posté le 1 déc. 2017

Je te conseille d'arranger la ponctuation, car dès la première phrase, on a l'impression qu'il manque quelque chose ( sans doute une virgule ).


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