correction histoire inventé

Publié le 12 avr. 2018 il y a 5A par shaima - Fin › 14 avr. 2018 dans 5A
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I was on my way to go back home , it was a really hot night in new york, It was calm and their was a little wind 

At approximatively , ten minutes of my house, I heard someone whispering louder and louder 

Scared , I hurried to go back home I had the impression to be followed I returned and I saw a man dressed in suit, he was wearing glasses and he was strong 

I was panicked and I ducked in a phone booth , I called the cops but that wasn’t enough because the man was armed I was afraid that he kills me then I called Henry Merrivale , a detective who I trusted

    « Hello? I say worried » 

«yes? Answered H.M in an effective voice and sur »

« I need your help I am frightened »

« How can I help you? Asked H.M »

«  I’m being followed an armed man I am frightened I declared »

« all right calm down go in a public place I’m coming »

I am go to a restaurant waiting until he come 

Relieved, I gave him an appointment where I fit in but the man had disappeared




4 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 12 avr. 2018

I was on my way to go back home , it was a really hot night in new york, It was calm and there was a little bit of wind 

At approximatively , ten minutes of my house, I heard someone whispering louder and louder 

Scared , I hurried to go back home I had the impression to be followed I turned around and I saw a man dressed in suit, he was wearing glasses and he was strong 

I was panicked and I ducked in a phone booth , I called the cops but that wasn’t enough because the man was armed I was afraid that he kills me then I called Henry Merrivale , a detective who I trusted

    « Hello? I say worried » 

«yes? Answered H.M in an effective voice and sur »

« I need your help I am frightened »

« How can I help you? Asked H.M »

«  I’m being followed by an armed man ,I am frightened I declared »

« all right calm down go in a public place I’m coming »

I am going to a restaurant waiting until he comes 

Relieved, I gave him an appointment where I fit in but the man had disappeared

willffy
willffy
Posté le 12 avr. 2018

Jekdisjsnd, mets en gras les corrections, c'est plus visible (Touche B en haut ce cette fenêtre)

Anonyme
Anonyme
Posté le 12 avr. 2018

I was on my way to go back home , it was a really hot night in new york, It was calm and there was a little wind 

At approximatively , ten minutes of my house, I heard someone whispering louder and louder 

Scared , I hurried to go back home I had the impression to be followed I faced back and I saw a man dressed in suit, he was wearing glasses and he was strong 

I was panicked and I ducked in a phone booth , I called the cops but that wasn’t enough because the man was armed I was afraid that he could kill me then I called Henry Merrivale , a detective whom I trusted

    « Hello? I say worried » 

«yes? Answered H.M in an effective voice and sur » ??? (tu veux dire quoi là ?)

« I need your help I am frightened »

« How can I help you? Asked H.M »

«  I’m being followed by an armed man I am frightened I declared »

« all right calm down go in a public place I’m coming »

I went to a restaurant waiting until he came

Relieved, I gave him an appointment where I fit in but the man disappeared

Anonyme
Posté le 14 avr. 2018

I was on my way back home on a really hot (summer) night in New York. It was calm and their was a little wind.

I was ten minutes from my house, when I suddenly heard someone whispering louder and louder as I walked by.

Scared , I hurried on my way back home but I had the nagging impression of being followed. I turned around in time just to see a tall, strong man in suit and wearing glasses.

I panicked and ducked into a phone booth to call the cops but that wasn’t going to be enough because the man was armed I was afraid he was coming after me to kill me.  I quickly decided to call Henry Merrivale, a detective that I grately trusted:

    « Hello?, I begun, worried

     - yes?, answered H.M in a sur and effective voice

    - I need your help, I am frightened 

     - How can I help you?, asked H.M 

     - I’m being followed by an armed man it frightens me, I declared hysterically

     - All right calm down go in a public place I’m coming »

He then told me that I was go to at a restaurant of his choosing, and wait until he came. I made sure that he would choose a place where I would fit in, and then hung up. 

I then turned around to make sure it was safe to leave the booth, but the man had disappeard. 


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