Notion d'anglais - Places and forms of power

Publié le 17 avr. 2017 il y a 6A par Anonyme - Fin › 20 avr. 2017 dans 6A
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Sujet du devoir

Bonjour,
Je suis en classe de terminale S et je passe mon oral d'anglais la semaine prochaine et j'aurais besoin d'une petite correction et de vos avis sur mon travail. Je précise que tout n'est pas entièrement rédigé mais il s'agit d'un plan très détaillé où presque tout est rédigé.
Merci d'avance pour votre aide.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

 

            I am going to talk about the notion places and forms of power. To begin with, I would give a definition of the power: the power is the ability to exercise control, authority, and influence on the others. To illustrate my notion, I will talk about the power of money. Indeed, money is a form of power and often leads to conflicts. To what extent money is considered as a form of power? First of all, money is a factor of materialism, it can also be a factor of immigration, but before everything, money is a factor of social inequalities.

 

 

I.                    Factor of materialism

 

-         Money is a great power because it’s the only way to improve life, to make it comfortable, it’s necessary to have money to live properly. In this way, money often make people too materialist. We can see for example in a cartoon, during Christmas season in a mall, a little boy who is setting on the legs of Santa and he is about to give him his wish list. At the same time, Santa wants to give him his resume saying to him that he will take his wish list only if the child give his resume to his dad. We can guess that Santa is unemployed and he looks really desperate and exhausted. The little boy looks astonished because he is disappointed, his dreams are shattered. This scene is very sad, the Christmas’ spirit is ruined because of the need of money, Christmas has evolved to a business.

 

II.                Factor of immigration

 

-         To have better life, often people choose to immigrate. The migrants can be poor people who want to find prosperity in a developed country, they can also be qualified young people… The American dream in particular is a myth born of the desire of prosperity because America was seen and is still seen like a country where anybody can prosper thanks to his work and his courage, even if he starts from nothing. The American dream is a recurrent topic in a lot of movies like Modern Times and The Immigrant of Charlie Chaplin, The Godfather…

 

III.             Factor of social inequalities

 

-          The poet Benjamin Zephaniah talks about this social inequalities caused by money in his poem untitled “Money” where he conveys a very negative view of money, blaming money for most of the world’s problem, in particular, he repeats the word “money” 11 times to insist on it.

This poem shows the gap between industrialized countries and developing countries and the injustice created by money. Indeed, developing countries and third world countries suffer from inequalities and have important economic problems. The author makes a hard criticism of modern society and blames rich people who do not share their wealth with people in need. This poem is also an attack on selfishness and vanity caused by money. Money is what separates people and creates injustice. The author wants to convey a message: if rich countries don’t face the problem, the gap between rich and poor will keep increasing. He wants to be the spokesman for deprived countries and wants people to bridge the gap created by money.

 

To conclude, we can say that money have a great power on the world to the extent that it’s the factor of many problems like materialism, social inequalities… It leads also to corruption, to reject of others… A lot of people use money to assert its power, sadly in our societies, more you have money and more you have power. To me it’s important to take a step back about money, we have to know to draw away from it.




2 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 17 avr. 2017

Il faudrait que tu présente des docs dans ton intro et tu pourrais essayer de faire une conclusion plus courte, elle ne doit faire que 2/3 phrases.

Anonyme
Posté le 19 avr. 2017

Il y a beaucoup de fautes ! fais toi relire ! Aussi, les gens souhaitent émigrer et non immigrer ! pour le pays de départ tu émigre, pour le pays qui reçoit tu immigre.


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