Oral anglais lv1

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I’m going to talk about the notion of « spaces and exchanges ». This notion deals with the humans, financier or cultural flows between different regions of the world. In this way, immigration is an example of these flows. So we will focus on the Mexicans immigration in the US that illustrates human flows between Latin America and North America. We are going to ask “ what are the effect of Mexicans immigration in the Us?
To find answer to this question, i have chosen 3 documents: an extract from the report Food inc. Then 2 extracts from blog. I will study this question along 3 lines. First I will talk about the Mexican’s disillusion. Then we will see why the US rejects now the immigration. Finally I’ll explain that illegal immigrants benefit the US’ economy.
Nowadays, all the Mexicans who yearn for a better life have already tried to cross the US’ Border. In fact, the American dream is so strong in Latin America that the wetbacks are prepared to anything to live in the US. For example, Rosa a personage from “crossing over” crosses the desert 3 times to be in this country. SO, imagine what their deception is when they finally get to US. They are rejected by the society, they have to work in the worst conditions. According to the report food inc, the illegal immigrants work principally in fruit picking and meat packing industry where they have to do the same task again, again and again. They are treated as a machine whose the aim is to work always more and cheaper.
In addition to being exploited wetbacks are totally rejected by the US population. In Fact, because of the economic crisis many Americans lose their jobs, their home.... and illegal immigrants seemed to be a perfect scapegoat. In this way, some lobbyist claim that immigrants steal American’s job, that immigrants are a financial burden etc ....While the US Was a country of immigration since the 17th century !
Paradoxically, the truth is that illegal immigrants are important to the Us economy, as well as vital to some industries. In fact, according to an open letter signed by 500 economists, the illegal immigration is beneficial to the US. For example they represent 50 percents of the famer worker. And so if the illegal immigrants were unauthorized, milk prices would increase about 60%. In this way, tax revenues generated by immigrants exceed the cost of the services they use. Contrary to the common point of view, illegal immigrants are necessary t the US.
To conclude, it must be noted that immigration is first of all a deception for wetbacks who left everything to come in the US. In fact, they are nowadays rejected by the American because of the economic crisis which increases tensions between ethnics. And some people claim that they are invaders. If it’s true, then it might be the firts time in history that a country has employed its invaders.

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