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BONJOUR, j'ai fait un devoir en anglais, j'aurais besoin d'aide pour que l'on me dise si il y a des fautes. merci
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Culture shock
My name is martin Perrin. I am a boy sixteen years old. I’m a student and I live in France. It all began when toward the end of 2005, my parents decided to live in America specifically in Washington because my dad found a job for live a better life according to my mother. Before I came to the U.S, I pictured that everything in the U.S was extra large, but that was only my imagination, I thought everyone was overweight and meals were very big. When I first arrived in America, I was so excited and exhilarated that I was finally in America. I discovered my new school, but I dreaded the thought of talking to student because my English was good, however I'm probably communicating badly but maybe I will get used to it in time. At the beginning, I had lots of difficult to speak English with my classmate, it was very annoying, It was necessary for me to become integrated. And, there was not only this, culture itself was a problem, the food for example, in USA the foods is very fat and mealtimes in the United States are slightly offset compared with the French hours. The life in US was very different, after about one month, things started to feel odd. Differences became more apparent. I’m felling unhappy, nonetheless my level in English was improving and I had more and more friends, the teachers were very nice but I missed France. During this period I couldn’t sleep good and I was depressed. Over the next few months, I understood American culture better and better every day I felt more and more comfortable with my new home. My happiest moment was when my dear friend one day remarked during a conversation:” Martin is a true American now! He eat and speak like us, he has changed a lot since his arrival!” It took 5 months to became an American.
Où j'en suis dans mon devoir
j'ai tout fait j'aurais juste besoin que l'on me dise où se situe mes fautes
5 commentaires pour ce devoir
for live : TO live a better life
I had lots of difficult : I had so many difficulties
He eat and speak : He eatS and speakS
Ce sont les fautes majeures que j'ai relevé! bon courage
merci à toi
My name is martin Perrin. I am a sixteen years old boy (inversion adjectif-sujet). I’m a student and I live in France. It all began when near (towards indique une direction) the end of 2005, my parents decided to live in America precisely(plus correct selon moi) in Washington because my dad found a job to(le but s'exprime vex to toujours) live a better life according to my mother. Before I came to the U.S, I pictured that everything in the U.S was extra large, but that was only my imagination, I thought everyone was overweighted (adjectif) and meals were very big. When I first arrived in America, I was so excited and exhilarated that I was finally in America. I discovered my new school, but I dreaded the thought of talking to student because my English was good, however I'm probably communicating badly but maybe I will get used to it in time. At the beginning, I had lots of difficulties to speak English with my classmate, it was very annoying, It was necessary for me to become integrated. And, there was not only this, culture itself was a problem, the food for example, in USA the foods is very fatty and mealtimes in the United States are slightly offset compared with the French hours. The life in US was very different, after about one month, things started to feel odd. Differences became more apparent. I’m felling unhappy, nonetheless my level in English was improving and I had more and more friends, the teachers were very nice but I missed France. During this period I couldn’t sleep good and I was depressed. Over the next few months, I understood American culture better and better every day I felt more and more comfortable with my new home. My happiest moment was when my dear friend one day remarked during a conversation:” Martin is a true American now! He eats and speaks like us, he has changed a lot since his arrival!” It took me 5 months to became an American.
Tu devrais faire attention à la concordance des temps: par moment on a l'impression que tu racontes ce que tu vis au quotidien, d'autres fois, on a plutôt l'impression que c'était comme ça il y a un moment, mais que c'est fini, je ne sais pas laquelle correspond au mieux avec ton sujet, mais tu devrais y jeter un oeil en te focalisant là-dessus.
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