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Financial Times (FT) is a daily newspaper, which deal with technologies, economy and politics. The chosen article is about Silicon Valley’s brain drain. In fact, François Hollande is the first French president since François Mitterrand in 1984 to visit Silicon Valley. He is annoyed that French engineers shift to America.

It is a terrible problem for France that its engineers go away. They are 60 000 only in California, making this State one of the biggest French diasporas. Going to America, they deprive taxes and many projects! Effectively, dozens of French start-ups have decamped to Silicon Valley, where it is easier to found investors and customers. As says Mr Hykes: “This is the place to be if you’re in the technology business – there are more opportunities per square kilometre”. Those engineers are happy, American life is better than the French one (for income principally), and firms are too, because frenchies are knowed for a high level of math, technology and physics graduation. Said Liam Boogar “French engineers have a great reputation in the Valley, which France has underleveraged”, we see that it is inside of the country that there is a problem.

In particularly, the problem with French legislation is that companies cannot expand very fast and do what they want. Thus, Amazon (an Internet-based retailer) was forced by the government to stop offering free delivering, in an attempt to protect bookstores. In an other way, Uber (a firm of linking persons and transport firms thanks to the Uber-app), was constraint to make passengers wait 15 before picking them up.

Finally, we see that even if many migrants go to America and cost it a lot, there are in parallel brain drains from USA. As the first Global power, it is very attractive, for the pleasure of high-tech firms. Immigration is not a bad thing for United States indeed.
Immigration was at first an opportunity for the United States to increase their population, but today it has become a problem, and requires many funds to inhibit unwanted migratory fluxes. For those who have already crossed the border, USA has to manage its constitution to give them a chance to live decently in the country and solve social problems. However, we see with the document, that USA undergo good immigration. Thus, we could say that immigration is a good thing for USA when it is moderate. This sequence is perfectly suited to the notion spaces and exchanges as it deals with the issues surrounding migration.

This document could be also link to the notion of places and forms of power, because we see that the president is constraint to go to California to discuss with CEOs, a new area of political and economical power.

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Financial Times (FT) is a daily newspaper, which deal with technologies, economy and politics. The chosen article is about Silicon Valley’s brain drain. In fact, François Hollande is the first French president since François Mitterrand in 1984 to visit Silicon Valley. He is annoyed that French engineers shift to America.

It is a terrible problem for France that its engineers go away. They are 60 000 only in California, making this State one of the biggest French diasporas. Going to America, they deprive taxes and many projects! Effectively, dozens of French start-ups have decamped to Silicon Valley, where it is easier to found investors and customers. As says Mr Hykes: “This is the place to be if you’re in the technology business – there are more opportunities per square kilometre”. Those engineers are happy, American life is better than the French one (for income principally), and firms are too, because frenchies are knowed for a high level of math, technology and physics graduation. Said Liam Boogar “French engineers have a great reputation in the Valley, which France has underleveraged”, we see that it is inside of the country that there is a problem.

In particularly, the problem with French legislation is that companies cannot expand very fast and do what they want. Thus, Amazon (an Internet-based retailer) was forced by the government to stop offering free delivering, in an attempt to protect bookstores. In an other way, Uber (a firm of linking persons and transport firms thanks to the Uber-app), was constraint to make passengers wait 15 before picking them up.

Finally, we see that even if many migrants go to America and cost it a lot, there are in parallel brain drains from USA. As the first Global power, it is very attractive, for the pleasure of high-tech firms. Immigration is not a bad thing for United States indeed.
Immigration was at first an opportunity for the United States to increase their population, but today it has become a problem, and requires many funds to inhibit unwanted migratory fluxes. For those who have already crossed the border, USA has to manage its constitution to give them a chance to live decently in the country and solve social problems. However, we see with the document, that USA undergo good immigration. Thus, we could say that immigration is a good thing for USA when it is moderate. This sequence is perfectly suited to the notion spaces and exchanges as it deals with the issues surrounding migration.

This document could be also link to the notion of places and forms of power, because we see that the president is constraint to go to California to discuss with CEOs, a new area of political and economical power.