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Bonjour,Alors voilà j'ai eu comme devoir de faire une histoire dans une maison hantée et j'aimerai que vous me corrigiez les fautes.
Merci beaucoup.
Où j'en suis dans mon devoir
It was 10 pm when Shorthouse and Julia arrived in front of the haunted house. At first, they believed not to be at the right place, because the house hadn't the appearance of a haunted house. She was surrounded with several houses, and the most surprised it is that she looked like them a lot, she was even identical to the others. Seen from the outside this house had nothing terrifying it is then that they decided to enter after a few minutes of hesitations to confirm all the tales of horrors which were said about all which takes place inside this house.Julia was the first one has to enter because it had the flashlight in the hands and she told to her nephew not to go away from her, that whatever happens, they needs that they are always close one of the other one. First of all, they moved forward with caution, they visited all the house, and for the moment no paranormal phenomena appeared. They then said to themselves that all these stories were false, that it was just stories to frighten the children, they did not believe any more in this stories of haunted house. They got ready to go out, when suddenly, the clock of the lounge indicated midnight... They did not pay it attention, until Shorthouse heard a voice close to its ear, he believed that it was his aunt who had spoken to him then he asked him to repeat what she had just said but she answered him that she had said nothing. It is in Julia's tour maintaining to feel a presence in its right. The front door that Shorthouse had opened clicked just like that, he tried to open him again but unsuccessfully. More and more strong voices were listened so that gratings of chairs, rumours of chains. They changed room to look where from these rumours came knowing that the house was empty, the house of contained no chair.. They changed room to look where from these rumours came knowing that the house was empty, the house of contained no chair.. They went to the kitchen and as soon as they entered the room, the rumours stopped. But a few minutes later creatures blacks had gone out of the ground in front of them. Julia knew that it was the stableman and the servant. Set of fear, they are put running to look for an exit, and with luck, the front door had unbolted. Shorthouse who was afraid usually never of anything, taken out of the house by trembling with fear...
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Bonjour Sabrina09,
Où j'en suis :
It was 10 pm when Shorthouse and Julia arrived in front of the haunted house. At first, they believed not to be at the right place, because the house hadn't the appearance of a haunted house. She was surrounded with several houses, and the most (surprised? que devrais-tu mettre ici? pas un participe passé!) it is that (she??) looked like them a lot, (she???) was even identical to the others. Seen from the outside this house had nothing terrifying (it is then=at that precise time) that they decided to enter after a few minutes of hesitations to confirm all the tales of horrors which were said about all (which??) takes place inside this house.
Julia was the first one (has =no)to enter because (it??) had the flashlight in the hands and she told to her nephew not to go away from her, that whatever happens, they need(s??) (that they are always close one of the other one=maladroit, refais ta phrase). First of all, they moved forward with caution, they visited all the house, and for the moment no paranormal phenomena appeared. They (then=at the beginning of the sentence) said to themselves that all these stories were false, that it was just stories to frighten the children, they did not believe any more in this stories of haunted house. They got ready to go out, when suddenly, the clock of the lounge indicated midnight... They did not pay (it) attention to (to pay attention to something), until Shorthouse heard a voice close to (its?? ear), he believed that it was his aunt who had spoken to him then he asked (him=oh!!!) to repeat what she had just said but she answered him that she had said nothing. It is in Julia's tour maintaining to feel a presence in (its??) right. The front door that Shorthouse had opened clicked just like that, he tried to open (him??) again but unsuccessfully. More and more strong voices were listened so that gratings of chairs, rumours of chains. They changed room to look where from these rumours came knowing that the house was empty, the house of contained no chair.. They changed room to look where from these rumours came knowing that the house was empty, the house of contained no chair.. They went to the kitchen and as soon as they entered the room, the rumours stopped. But a few minutes later (creatures blacks=adj+nom) had gone out of the ground in front of them. Julia knew that it was the stableman and the servant. Set of fear, they are put running to look for an exit, and with luck, the front door had unbolted. Shorthouse who was afraid usually never of anything, taken out of the house by trembling with fear
Sabrina ton text est très intéressant, maintenant, révise les pronoms possessifs je les est mis entre parenthèses.
Essaye de trouver des synonymes par exemple house.
Si tu as des questions n'hésite pas
Dancelina75
Bon excuse les fautes bêtes du style text(e), je les (ai), il fallait que je corrige mes fautes!!!
Dancelina
Dancelina
Merci beaucoup dancelina pour ton aide, je viens de finir de corriger mon texte. Encore merci !
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c'est pas he returned to julia.Sinon le reste est bien.
Bravo à toi.
Bon courage pour la suite.