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Bonjour, Notre professeur d'anglais nous a demandée de faire un petit exposée en anglais sur l'eau potable rare dans certains pays : On doit évoquer : Rarity of safe water and impact on those who don't have access to safe water. Pouvez vous corriger les fautes orthographes ou grammaticale. Merci pour votre aide.
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This morning , and every morning, when to brush my teeth in the bathroom sink, or to pay a glass of water to drink, I am most thankful that the water coming from the tap is safe. For that, I am profoundly thankful.
Safe water is available for free or almost free to me and everyone else here in France. But this is not the case in most other countries like in countries in Africa. In fact, safe water is rare in certain countries. Causes are many : Climate change is the most important ; Factors such as climate change increase pressures on natural water resources especially in manufacturing and agricultural irrigation. There are too Population, household size and growth and affluence wich all affect how much water is used. This causes are many impact on those don't have access to safe water : In fact, according to the United Nations:
-783 million people do not have access to safe water, which is more than 2.5 times the population of the United States.
- Roughly 3.5 million people die each year due to inadequate water supply, sanitation hygiene wich causes several diseases and parasites like cholera, typhoid and dysentery.
80% of sewage in developing countries is discharged untreated directly into water bodies.(80% des eaux usées dans les pays en développement sont rejetées sans traitement directement dans les plans d'eau).Oceans and other waters are affected by pollution
Safe drinking water is a blessing but France is one of few places on earth where contaminated water is not a public health issue. That is why must preserve water for futur generation. There are two many to protect safe water :
Energy conservation. In some regions of the world over 15% of total electricity consumption is devoted to water management. And habitat conservation like use recycled paper or turn off the tap when you wash your hands.
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This morning , and every morning, when it's time to brush my teeth in the bathroom sink, or to drink a glass of water, I'm very thankful for the water that is coming from the tap is safe to drink. For that, I am profoundly thankful. <---- ( Tu répète deux fois la meme chose, a supprimer )
Safe water is available for free or almost free to me and everyone else here in France. But it is not the case in other countries ; like in countries in Africa. In fact, safe water is rare in certain countries. There are many causes : Climate changes is the most important ; " A factor such as climate changes increase pressures on natural water resources especially in manufacturing and agricultural irrigation" <----(Qu'est ce que tu veux dire par la ). There are too many households growth and affluence wich all affect how much water is used. This causes have a strong impact on those who don't have access to safe water : In fact, according to the United Nations:
-783 million of people do not have access to safe water, which is more than 2.5 times the population of the United States.
- Roughly , 3.5 million people die every year due to inadequate water supply, sanitation hygiene wich causes several diseases and parasites like cholera, typhoid and dysentery.
80% of sewage in developing countries is discharged untreated directly into waterholes .Oceans and other waters are affected by pollution.
Safe drinking water is a blessing but France is one of few places on earth where contaminated water is not a public health issue. That is why we must preserve water for our future generation. There are two many causes for us to protect safe water :
Energy conservation... In some regions of the world over 15% of total electricity consumption is devoted to water management.
And habitat conservation, like use recycled paper or turn off the tap when you're washing your hands.
Tes idées sont mélangés! Et ne néglige pas la ponctuation quand tu écris !
Bonne année scolaire ! :)
Merci pour ton aide mais J'ai essayé de faire un texte en rassemblant les idées que l'on devait aborder donc aprés, comment faire pour les classer ?
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pourquoi ce petit jeu qui va te mener tout droit au bannissement? (modération)
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Un courage ne m'est pas trés utile ... Stupide mais merci ..
Je ne suis pas très bonne en anglais mais il y a une chose que je sais : n oublie pas la ponctuation !
Tu oublie souvent des points !!
Il fait que tu fasse un plan pour organiser tes idées !
Ils ont besoin d'aide !
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desole je ne suis vraiment pas bon en anglais;;;
En fait je pense que quand tu donne un exemple (There are many causes ..); la tu as donner la principale, mais tu aurais pu , apres en citer d'autre comme ( Political, economic, and more causes are responsible for not having safe water in other countries.)
Tu peux placer cet phrase après " ....agricultural irrigation"