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Bonjour je devais réaliser une rédaction en anglais que j'ai faite sur ma ville parfaite et aimerais savoir s'il y a des fautes
Merci !
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The city I want to like in will be a big city with a positive message for every person who wants a beautiful life.
In the day my city would be impressive with a good atmosphere. Person's life will be not perfect but not imperfect. I would like to have parks and museums for gather people in differents places. In the museums there will have a lot of colorful and inspiring pictures and in the parks there will have loads of things to do.
In the night I would like some of the malls to be open because like that people can comes with their families sometimes and share good memories on the ice rink for example. In my city when you will walks in the streets and will looks at the skycrapers you will be just dazzled by the color, the light, the atmosphere and at the end you will just a smile on your face. I would like the president of my city to be gentle, listening to others and not selfish.
On the contrary I would not to have terrorist attack because I don't want people get hurts emotionally and physically, I don't want that the people be selfish or doesn't accepts the fact that some people needs help. I would not people to be violent or hypocrite. I would not myself to live in this kind of city.
In my opinion this kind of city would be better like that because a lot of people would learn how to see the beauty of their own city and would be more happy and focused on their dreams.
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According to me, the perfect city is a big city with a positive message for every person who wants a beautiful life.
During the day, my city would be impressive with a good atmosphere. people's life will be constantly based on happiness. There would be parks and museums to gather people in differents places. In the museums, there would have a lot of colorful and inspiring pictures and in the parks there will have loads of things to do.
During the night, I would like some of the malls to be open. Therefore, people would be able to come with their families sometimes. In my city, if you would look at the skycrapers, you would be just dazzled by the color, the light, the atmosphere and at the end you will just smile. I would like the president of my city to be gentle, listening to others and not selfish.
There wouldn't have terrorist attacks because I don't want people get hurt emotionally and physically. I don't want that the people be selfish or doesn't accept the fact that some people need help. People wouldn't be violent or hypocrite. I would not like myself to live in this kind of city.
In my opinion, this kind of city would be better because a lot of people would learn how to see the beauty of their own city and they would be more happy and focused on their dreams.
The city I would like to live in would be a big city with a positive message for anyone who wants a beautiful life.
During the day, my city would be impressive with a good atmosphere. People's life would not be perfect but not imperfect either . I would like to have parks and museums for people to gather in differents places. In the museums there would have a lot of colorful and inspiring pictures and in the parks there would have lots of things to do.
At night, I would like some of the malls to be open because this way people could come with their families sometimes and share good memories on the ice rink for example. In my city when you walk in the streets and look at the skycrapers you would just be dazzled by the color, the light, the atmosphere and you would just end up with a smile on your face. I would like the president of my city to be gentle, listening to others and not selfish.
On the contrary I would not like to have terrorists attacks because I don't want people to get hurt emotionally or physically, I don't want people to be selfish or not to accept the fact that some people need help. I would not like people to be violent or hypocrite. I would not like myself to live in this kind of city.
In my opinion this kind of city would be better this way. A lot of people could learn to see the beauty of their own city and they would be more happy and focused on their dreams.
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Il y a quelques fautes:
ligne 2 : during the day et non in the day
l.4 : gathering people et non gather people
l.7 : come et non comes
l.9 : look et non looks et skyscrapers
l.12 : hurt et non hurts
l.13 : accept et non accepts
voila, j ai rien vu d autres j espere que j' ai corrigé justement ;)