Compte-rendu voyage Manchester

Sujet du devoir

SUR LE CONTENU
PARAGRAPH 1 : Monday 5/12, D-DAY !
That morning I woke up early and I ate my breakfast.
Then, I got ready to leave home. We all met in Cergy Préfecture and a bus drove us to Charles de
Gaulle Airport.
The plane took off at 10:20 and we flew for an hour and a half.
I felt very  happy  cool  anxious.
We finally landed in Manchester at 10:55.
I was  excited  nervous  worried
Using the example given, write a summary of 250 words about your departure until your arrival
in Manchester : schedule, means of transport, people, emotions...
PARAGRAPH 2 : about the city of Manchester
Write a summary of 250 words about your first impressions.
Did you like the city of Manchester, why or why not ?
What about the architecture (modern, traditional), the atmosphere at the time of Christmas (lively,
boring), the population (mixed, multicultural...) ?
PARAGRAPH 3 : the strong points
What were the most amazing moments of the school trip for you ?
Chillfactor ? Trafford Shopping Centre ? Mossley Hollins High ? The Christmas Markets?
Did you enjoy staying at the youth hostel ? Why or why not ?
Explain in a summary of 250 words.
PARAGRAPH 4 : about the textile industry
At MOSI, what more did you learn during the presentation about work in a textile factory during
the industrial era?
What about the general working conditions : were they hard ? Why, or why not ? Give examples.
What do you think of the working conditions for children especially? Explain and give examples.
Clarify all in a paragraph of 250 words.
SUR LA PRESENTATION
• Vous pouvez utiliser le support de votre choix pour présenter votre carnet de voyage :
support manuscrit ou informatique, diaporama... faites preuve d'originalité.
• Les illustrations sont obligatoires, leur choix et leur disposition doivent être cohérents.
• Les 4 paragraphes doivent être traités, dans l'ordre qui vous convient, soyez logiques.
• Votre travail doit être soigné et traité avec rigueur.
• Vous devez rédiger en anglais 4 paragraphes de 250 mots chacun, ce qui est un exercice
particulièrement difficile, appliquez-vous et montrez l'intérêt et le plaisir que vous avez eu
pendant ces 4 jours.
BAREME
• Un soin particulier devra porter sur la correction de la langue (grammaire) / 8
• Le niveau d'expression doit être riche et varié (vocabulaire) / 8
• Les informations apportées sont pertinentes et cohérentes (idées, connaissances) / 16
• La présentation est originale, personnelle et soignée, les illustrations choisies avec soin / 8

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Je n'ai pas encore fait la présentation mais voilà mes textes:

That morning I woke up early , I checked that I had all my stuff so I was very stressed to forget a thing. Then, I got ready to leave home. My father and me went at Emma's because she came to Cergy with us. We all met in Cergy Prefecture in order to take a bus. This bus drove us to Charles de Gaulle Airport. We passed at the customs and I didn't have problems with them. We waited one hour at Charles de Gaulle Airport before took a bus to go to the plane. The plane took of at 10:20 am. It was my first trip in plane. However I wasn't very anxious since everybody say to me that a trip by plane is pleasant. In the plane, I was next to Isaac. He is crazy about planes so he took many photos and he explained me many things of the planes. We traveled with the company flybe. The problem was the stewardess spoke English with in this company and not French whereas with AirFrance for the return the stewardess spoke French. They talked very fast and we didn't really understand that they said. Yet during the theft especially when we landed I suffered from the ears but an other friend gives me a chewing gum and it passed. We flew for an hour and a half. We finally landed in Manchester at 10:55. The stewardess said to us « Welcome To Manchester » and that at the time we saw the rain and the hail. We were laugh out loud. On one hand I was very happy to be arrived in Manchester and I was right as we passed a great trip in Manchester.

Paragraph 2
I like the city of Manchester even if it often rains and it is cold As a result the ground is always wet and it is annoying. But the city is magnificent therefore it isn't grave. Moreover there were a great Christmas Market and many good shops where we bought many closes and others memories.
The first day we visited the city with a guide. The architecture is very Victorian and quite modern. There are many houses with red bricks and they show the Victorian architecture. The old cotton towns are renovated in offices o houses. The town hall is the oldest Victorian building of the England. Its style is Gothic Revival. There are many skyscrapers in Manchester. The largest is the Beetham Tower. There are many famous people who live in flats of this tower. Therefore It should be very comfortable and pleasant to live in this tower. We also saw a square : Albert Square. It is the square where is located the town hall. He wears the name Albert since he refers to the Prince Albert. A few monument are built in honor to the Prince Albert in this square.
The atmosphere of the time at Christmas in Manchester is lively. We visited the Christmas Market of Albert Square and it was great. I love Christmas and its atmosphere. There were many nice things to buy. We saw a splendid decoration outside the town hall. I loved it!
To me the population of Manchester is rather mixed because there are many different cultures in Manchester but in majority the people is Britannic seeing that 71,6 per cent of the population of Manchester is Britannic.

Paragraph 4
The first day we visited the museum of the cotton industry. It was very interesting. We started to word on the cotton industry and we achieved the work when we visited the museum. We saw why the conditions of the work in the cotton towns were very hard. Seeing that the machinery were very dangerous the children could dead o hurt. For example they could cut a leg if they wasn't quite fast to clean the road goes the machinery passes. Indeed the machinery never stopped and the children had to clean after the machinery passed and before she came back. Sometimes the children didn't have the time to return out of the road and they were crushed by the machinery. They died.
Moreover in some machines they could stick a finger when they had to on or off the machinery or touch the machinery if there was a problem with the cotton.
For the adults it also was very dangerous but less than for children because they were less sensitive. What's more I suppose that they were more fast and they were probably more careful.

Despite theses accidents many persons came to Manchester because the industry of cotton brought many works and at this time there were the famine in England that is why people rushed on any working.
On top of that the children were poorly paid and they didn't have to complain since their families didn't have money as a result they had to work so they shouldn't be transferred. Without them their families died of starvation.

Paragraph 3
The third day we went to Mossley Hollins High School (M>Manners+H>Hard work+H>Honesty=S>Success). It was my strong point of the trip. I love this school for many reasons.
They have amphitheaters and a fitness room. Their gymnasium is wonderful. I was very jealous of their shool because Rosa-Bonheur hasn't every that. In their shool there are 5 floors and their class are arranged by subjects. Mossley Hollins is a young school. It opened in February two thousand and eleven. The students of this school are very lucky. Moreover in this school every works with the fingerprints D.N.A and I enjoyed that. What's more they can stay inside during the recrations. Yet it's normal because in Manchester it is more cold than Bray-et-Lu.
Moreoever the rules of this school are great. They are very different from Rosa-Bonheur. The students are generally very wise and they have to respect the rules or they have to stay thirty minutes in the shool at the end of the courses. One top of that they have pretty uniforms and like that everybodys are equal.












We passed a very good day in Mossley Hollins. In the morning we followed a technology class and it was very interesting. The teacher and the students did a survey on our favorites attractions in London. In this first class I spoke English and Spain because this students didn't speak French since they learnt the Spain. They were very sympathic with me. Then we went to a French class. The English students were in ten class and they didn't speak French well. I think that they didn't speak French very well because to them everyone talks English so they don't have to learn others languages. Their teacher was very funny. We had a good laugh during this course.After we visited the school with oldest students and it was great but we were very jealous. Then we ate it was very good. The staff looked after us like royalty. During the lunch break we returned to the fitness room that we saw during the visit. We passed a good moment. The first and the last class of the afternoon was still the French course with the same teacher. This time the students were in nine class that is why they spoke French less well than their peers. Like with the first French course we sang an old French song. It was very difficult to leave this school. It was so good!

Vous pensez que c'est bien?
Et est-ce que il y a des fautes?
Merci d'avance ^^