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bonjour,je dois écrire ma présentation en anglais je ne suis pas trés forte en anglais et mon texte est rempli de faute j' aimerais que vous m' aidiez à le corriger et à l' ameillorer et à me dire si je pourrais ajouter des chosesOù j'en suis dans mon devoir
My name is amal qada. I am 14 years old so I was born February 3, 1996 in *******. I have two little sisters who 's casually refer salma yasmine and the eldest is 7 years and 10 months early.I live in ******, which is north of France and I study at college a****** favorite subject is History because I have a great teacher
I have long brown hair and brown eyes. I measure 1.62 meters.
I am sociable and kind, shy but very cool.
I listen to every style of music but mostly R & B. My favorite television series Dr. House and his NCIS. I read manga. My favorite animal is the cat. I have 1 cat s name is nina.
My favorite pastime is going out with my friends and I listen to music.
I like going to parties and dancing. I play the guitar, I ride horses because I like horses a lot.
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Bonjour,
je te propose:
My name is Amal Qada. I am 14 years old and I was born on February 3rd, 1996 in *******. I have two little sisters [who 's casually refer salma yasmine and the eldest is 7 years and 10 months early] => cela n'a aucun sens, que veux-tu dire?
I live in ******, which is situated in northern France and I'm studying at ****** Junior High School. My favorite subject is History because I have a great teacher
I have long brown hair and brown eyes. I'm 1.62 meters tall.
I am sociable and kind, shy but very cool.
I listen to every style of music but mostly R & B. My favorite television series are House MD and NCIS. I read manga. My favorite animals are cats. I have 1 cat, its name is Nina.
My favorite pastimes are going out with my friends and listening to music.
I like to go to parties and to dance. I play the guitar, I go horse-riding because I like horses a lot.
Bon courage pour ta présentation!
je te propose:
My name is Amal Qada. I am 14 years old and I was born on February 3rd, 1996 in *******. I have two little sisters [who 's casually refer salma yasmine and the eldest is 7 years and 10 months early] => cela n'a aucun sens, que veux-tu dire?
I live in ******, which is situated in northern France and I'm studying at ****** Junior High School. My favorite subject is History because I have a great teacher
I have long brown hair and brown eyes. I'm 1.62 meters tall.
I am sociable and kind, shy but very cool.
I listen to every style of music but mostly R & B. My favorite television series are House MD and NCIS. I read manga. My favorite animals are cats. I have 1 cat, its name is Nina.
My favorite pastimes are going out with my friends and listening to music.
I like to go to parties and to dance. I play the guitar, I go horse-riding because I like horses a lot.
Bon courage pour ta présentation!
Bonjour Nina59,
Voici le texte corrigé:
"My name is Amal QADA. I am 14 years old, I was born on February 3rd, 1996 in *******. I have two little sisters who casually refers to Salma and Yasmine and the eldest is 7 and 10 months early(???).
I live in ******, which is in the north of France and I study at college ******. My favourite subject is History because I have a great teacher.
I have long brown hair and brown eyes. I measure 1meter62.
I am sociable and kind, shy but very cool.
I listen to every style of music but mostly R&B. My favorite television series is Dr.House and his NCIS. I read mangas. My favourite animal is the cat. I have 1 cat, it's name is Nina.
My favourite pastime is going out with my friends and I listening to music.
I like going to parties and dancing. I play the guitar, I ride horses because I like horses a lot."
Cordialement,
Benjamin CNED 3ème
Voici le texte corrigé:
"My name is Amal QADA. I am 14 years old, I was born on February 3rd, 1996 in *******. I have two little sisters who casually refers to Salma and Yasmine and the eldest is 7 and 10 months early(???).
I live in ******, which is in the north of France and I study at college ******. My favourite subject is History because I have a great teacher.
I have long brown hair and brown eyes. I measure 1meter62.
I am sociable and kind, shy but very cool.
I listen to every style of music but mostly R&B. My favorite television series is Dr.House and his NCIS. I read mangas. My favourite animal is the cat. I have 1 cat, it's name is Nina.
My favourite pastime is going out with my friends and I listening to music.
I like going to parties and dancing. I play the guitar, I ride horses because I like horses a lot."
Cordialement,
Benjamin CNED 3ème
=> Chickenmanben95, explique-moi les modifications que tu as apportées? Si c'est pour proposer une correction pleines de fautes, il vaudrait mieux ne pas poster et se concentrer sur tes propres devoirs...
Coucou !
Tout d'abord, losque tu te présentes tu pourrais dire :
Hi ! My first name is Amal, and my surmane is Qada.
Pour dire ou tu habits :
I live in ****, more precisly in the "south-west" (tu peux dire nord ouest si tu habites dans le nord west, c'est un exemple) part of the country. The town that I live in is called ***, it's a small village wich is famous for his very huge lac. ( j'ai pris ici l'exemple du lac mais bien sur c'est à toi de choisir)
Tu dis : I have long brown hair and brown eyes :
- tu pourrais rajouter l'adjectif curly (frisé) ou straight (raide) en fonction de tes cheveux.
ex : I have a long brown SRAIGHT hair.
- et pour dire que tu as des yeux marrons, tu peux utiliser une tournure qui fait toujours sensation, utlisant le verbe être :
ex : I'm green eyed. (n'oublies pas le ED à la fin de eyed)
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Tout d'abord, losque tu te présentes tu pourrais dire :
Hi ! My first name is Amal, and my surmane is Qada.
Pour dire ou tu habits :
I live in ****, more precisly in the "south-west" (tu peux dire nord ouest si tu habites dans le nord west, c'est un exemple) part of the country. The town that I live in is called ***, it's a small village wich is famous for his very huge lac. ( j'ai pris ici l'exemple du lac mais bien sur c'est à toi de choisir)
Tu dis : I have long brown hair and brown eyes :
- tu pourrais rajouter l'adjectif curly (frisé) ou straight (raide) en fonction de tes cheveux.
ex : I have a long brown SRAIGHT hair.
- et pour dire que tu as des yeux marrons, tu peux utiliser une tournure qui fait toujours sensation, utlisant le verbe être :
ex : I'm green eyed. (n'oublies pas le ED à la fin de eyed)
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I like hanging out with my friends au lieu de going out with ...
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"I measure 1.62 meters." => I measure 5 feets and 3,5 inches (1.62 meters)"
"My favorite television series Dr. House and his NCIS." =>
My favorite television series are Dr. House and NCIS.
"I have 1 cat s name is nina." => I have got a cat and its name is Nina.
bon courage.