exercice d'anglais 6

Sujet du devoir

Tell a story about a nightmare at sea.
-Decide on your nightmare.
*You can choose a shipwreck (Titanic), a problem with fishes (Jaws), a mutiny (The Bounty), pirates (Pirates of the Caribbean), an explorer's difficulties, an imaginary situation, a dream, etc.
-Write a rough draft. Then correct and rewrite.
*Decide if you are the main character("i")or if you are writing about his/her("(s)he").
*Make the reader want to read your story presentation & suspense.
Use a computer if you can.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Bonjour,
Voici mon texte :
I go on a cruise in a beautiful and big boat, we are many passengers. There a dance floor, music, a restaurant. We are in our cabin when we hear a big noise that do tremble the boat. We go all on the bridge to see what happens and there we see a big large whale that bang the boat. People are terrified, they cried. The captain takes his gun and tries to kill the whale but she bangs stronger and makes a hole in the boat. The boat begins to sink and everyone panics, cries. There are peoples who jump. We are all scare of the wale because she is enormous. Peoples cry "we go we to drown". There are peoples who can not swim. There unsrest.The boat begins to sink. The captain does an appeal for help for radio for that we can save us. But the boat sinks and i think that it's the end, i will die. I cry and i wake up. I look around me but i am in my bed, in my bedroom. It was a nightmare.

Voila pouvez vous corriger mon texte svp, me dire où j'ai des fautes... s'il vous plait. Merci d'avance.