Exercice sur publicité anglais

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour, je dois écrire un texte en anglais sur une publicité télévisée, pourriez-vous lire mon texte et me dire s'il y a des erreurs ou comment pourrais-je l'améliorer SVP ?

PS : j'ai choisi la pub biberon éveil de lactel (dis-papa)

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

I'm going to talk about my favorite advertisement. A man wants his baby to say "dad" but he always says "mum". The father proposes an ultimatum : the baby must say dad or the father will drink the feeding bottle EVEIL. Displeased, the baby moves his hands and hit the packet of cereals and it falls down. Then, the mother comes and ask "Who did it ?" and the baby answers "DAD !"

My opinion : I like this advertisement because the baby is funny and so cute ! Unlike other babies, this one seems clever ! This advertisement is nice and when you see it in a shop, you want to buy it however I'm not a baby so I don't buy it !