Vérification d'un texte en anglais pour un oral !

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour/Bonsoir,

je dois passer un oral d'anglais, j'ai trouvé mon sujet et je l'ai aussi traduis, je voudrai avoir une vérification, pour voir si je n'ai pas fait de faute ou autre et voir si mon texte pourrait être amélioré. Et aussi, je voudrai savoir si mon texte est bien structuré, et assez long... Merci d'avance.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Today, I want to talk about a movie: "There's something about Mary".
Ted, in the past, was fall in love with Mary, he would like to recover her. He hires a private detective, Pat Healy, to find her. The detective thinks that Ted is crazy. Pat is going to Miami and find Mary. She is beautiful, kind and she is single. Pat decides to keep Mary for him. He tells at Ted that that she became big, she is paralyzed, and has four children. But Tucker, an architect, is also in love with Mary. With Pat, they don't want that Ted meets Mary, they want to get ride of him, who has finally decided to come to Miami.
At the end of the movie, Mary discovers the story and she chooses to keep Ted !