Anglais

Publié le 15 févr. 2012 il y a 12A par Anonyme - Fin › 22 févr. 2012 dans 12A
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Sujet du devoir

Redaction que j'ai rédigé moi-même je vous laisse regardez mes fautes car il doit y en avoir beaucoup.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

In reading the letter, Armand could not imagine that he also had origins slaves. He was ashamed and at the same time because he was angry because of him and Desiree had gone over with the baby. He knew not whether he should keep quiet about his racial heritage or tell everyone Desiree. Armand was thinking. He decided to announce it to Desiree because after all she had to know that he too was of slave. The only problem is he did not know where he could be found. So he decided to go see Madame Valmonde louse whether she knew where her daughter. She replied that she did not know but she had an idea and it might be in the bayou. Ms. Valmonde began to cry in pronouncing this word. Why are you crying? asked Armand. You have not to worry.
If I have to worry because if they are left in the bayou, there is little chance they are alive because it is a pretty hostile place for a woman and her baby without any particular case.
Ms. Valmonde not barely had time to finish the sentence that ran armand determined to found them alive. He felt guilty. Arriving at the Bayou, Armand's heart was beating fast. He hoped to see them again. In the distance, Armand saw a silhouette. So he went up and found the baby Desiree. He was relieved to see them again. However, Desiree was tired and shook him but the baby was healthy. He told her that if the baby was a Quatron it was because he also had slave origins. He even apologized to her and assured her he had changed his attitude toward blacks and slaves.
Desiree was pleased and surprised by this change. She hastened to see his mother for reassurance.
Madame Valmonde was delighted and relieved. Moreover, his daughter told him she was going back to live with Armand and the baby. All ended in joy and gaiety.



3 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 15 févr. 2012
Armand couldn’t imagine that he also had slaves’ origins before to he read the letter. He was ashamed and at the same time he was angry because Desiree had gone away with their baby because of him. He didn’t know if he should keep quiet about his racial heritage. Armand was thinking. He decided to announce it to Desiree because after all she was her wife and she had to know that he was a slave too (juste Désirée n’a pas forcément des origines africaines. Justement l’histoire montre que c’est Armand et non elle qui en a et donc qu’il l’a accuse trop vite). The only problem was he did not know where he could found her. So he decided to go to Madame Valmonde’s to know where her daughter was. She replied that she did not know but she had an idea. It might be in the bayou. Mrs. Valmonde began to cry when she pronounced this word. “Why are you weeping ?” asked Armand. “Don’t worry !”
“I’m sure I have to be worried because if they are in the bayou, there is just a little chance for them to be still alive because it is a hostile place for a woman and her baby without any particular stuff.” she said.
Mrs. Valmonde had barely finished her sentence that Armand started to run, determined to find them alive. He felt guilty. In the Bayou, Armand's heart was beating fast. He hoped to see them again. After a long research, Armand saw a silhouette. Finally he had found the baby and Desiree ! He was relieved to see them safe. However, Desiree was exhausted and very sad because of his behavior, but the baby was fine : he was sleeping. He told Désirée that if the baby was a Quatron it was because he had African origins. He beg her to forgive him and promised her he would change his behavior towards blacks and slaves.
Desiree was pleased and surprised by this change. She hastened to see her mother to reassure her.
Madame Valmonde was delighted and relieved. Moreover, hr daughter told her she was going to return to live with Armand and their beloved baby. All ended in joy and gaiety.
Anonyme
Posté le 15 févr. 2012
Voilà :) c'est vraiment bien ce que tu as écrit. Il y avait pas mal de fautes. j'ai tout corriger. Je ne suis pas spécialement géniale en anglais mais là ça passe ^^

J'ai pas compté ; ça fait 300 mots ?

Anonyme
Posté le 15 févr. 2012
Ton texte n'est pas très compréhensif. Peux-tu dire ce que tu as mis en français car parfois je ne vois pas ce que tu essaies de dire.

Déjà au début tu mets : When reading..... he could not imagine that he was a descendant of slaves.

Je corrige le texte de Taram si cela peut t'aider

When reading the letter, Armand couldn’t imagine that he was a descendant of slaves . He was ashamed and at the same time he was angry because Desiree had gone away with their baby because of him. He didn’t know if he should keep quiet about his racial heritage. Armand was thinking. He decided to tell Desiree about it because after all she was his wife and she had to know that he was a slave too (). The only problem was he did not know where he could find her. So he decided to go to Madame Valmonde’s to know where her daughter was. She replied that she was not aware of her whereabouts but she had an idea. She might be in the bayou. Mrs. Valmonde began to cry when she said this word. “Why are you weeping ?” asked Armand. “Don’t worry !”
“I’m sure I have to be worried because if they are in the bayou, there might be not alive because it is a dangerous place for a woman and her baby she said.
Mrs. Valmonde barely finished her sentence that Armand started to run, determined to find them alive. He felt guilty. In the Bayou, Armand's heart was beating fast. He hoped to see them again. After a long search, Armand saw a shadow. Finally he found the baby and Desiree ! He was relieved to see them safe and alive. However, Desiree was exhausted and very disappointed at him, but the baby was fine : he was sleeping. He told Désirée that if the baby was a Quatron it was because he had African origins. He beg her to forgive him and promised her he would change his opinion on blacks and slaves.
Desiree was pleased and surprised by his attitude. She wanted to see her mother to get some comfort.
Madame Valmonde was happy and relieved. Moreover, her daughter told her she was going to return to live with Armand and their beloved baby. Everything was alright now!

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