Correction d'un dialogue.

salut,
poses ta redaction je vais faire mon possible

Merci beaucoup :)
Par contre je ne vais pas mle " retour" à la ligne quand une autre personne parle.

Ana arrives at home and she heads towards the door.
"Mum! Mum! It's you ? Angel says surprised."" Yes It's me" She says smiling and takes her daughter in the arm.
Her son, who heard his mother, runs to his mother.
"Mum mum! I missed you if you knew ! ""Yoo too, I missed my family. Come childes we going into the house to our grandmother. Where is she ?"" She is in the living room, she reats."" But I hear my daughter speak or I dreaming ?" She says joyful. "It's me Ana. You don't dream. I am good in front of you."" But.. But how it is that you are here ? You should not be in the United States ? And you must not work " " No because I came back to Mexico because I needed to see you. I missed you too much. I therefore decided to take the risk of coming back" " They needed also to see you if you knew. It's so long that we don't see you. You was present that bu the sending of gift and money. There was a big lack. " " I know, I hope despite my absence that the childre always love me and that they understand this situation "
" This will untersand all sacrifice which you made for your family. Wa can be very graceful to you for this. Thank's for you we are not poor but now are unhappy beaucause you are not with us. We can be also proud " " If only I had not to go to work illegaly, I could come see you more often. She says sadly to his mother looking her children. " You are going leave again?" " Yes I think " " How did you come her ? " As I went to the United States. I was hide me in a car then I accrossed the desert and finaly I crowled in a draipipe"

Voilà..

because ( ligne 19 )
but (ligne 13 )
I crawled in a drainpipe ( derniere ligne )
voila sinan d

dans l'enssemble c'est pas mal *

Ah oui des erreurs de frappes pour because et but.. Désolée.
D'accord, merci pour ton aide !

derien mais je pense que tu devrais attendre que d'autre personne analyse ta redaction car j'ai beau etre en premiere literraire, je fais des fautes en anglais alors attends l'avie des autre :)

Je pense bien, mais merci d'avoir pris le temps de lire ça :)

XD derien

salut :)
Ana arrives at home and she heads towards the door.
"Mum! Mum! is that you ? Angel says surprised."" Yes It's me" She says smiling and takes her daughter in her arm.
Her son, who heard his mother, runs to her.
"Mum mum! if you knew how much I missed you ! "" I missed my family too". Come on kids we are going into the house to see your grandmother. Where is she ?"" She is in the living room, she reats."" have I heard my daughter speaking or am I dreaming ?" She says joyful. "It's me Ana. You are not dreaming. I am right in front of you."" But.. But how it is that you are here ? shouldn't you be in the United States and work? " " No I came back to Mexico because I needed to see you. I missed you too much. I therefore decided to take the risk of coming back" " if you knew how much they wanted to see you too. we have'nt see you in so long. "You were present that bu the sending of gift and money." ( qu'est ce que tu voulais dire ? je n'ais pas bien compris ^^) There was a big lack. " " I know, I hope that despite my absence the children always love me and that they understand this situation "
" They will understand all the sacrifice that you have made for your family. Wa can be very grateful to you for this. Thank's to you we are not poor but now we are unhappy because you are not with us. We can be also proud " " If only I had not to go to work illegaly, I could come to see you more often. She says sadly to his mother looking her children. "are you going to leave again?" " Yes I think " " How did you come here ? " As I went to the United States. I was hidden in a car then I accrossed the desert and finaly I crowled in a draipipe"

Tu as répondu un peu trop tard, mais merci d'avoir pris la peine de corriger :)