corrigé dialogue anglais

bonjour, bah je crois que cest tout bon !

Juste pense à mettre le sujet "je" en majuscule ;) 

Bonjour

Voici ci-dessous quelques corrections en gras dans ton texte

(J'ai juste une petite remarque sur le sujet :"imagine the conversation between you and your dad, mother etc". Posé ainsi, cela signifie que c'est à la première personne du singulier, s'il s'agit d'une conversation entre toi et l'un de tes parents...or je vois que tu as mis en scène un autre jeune, donc 3eme singulier, qui veut partir. Est-ce que tu es sûr que cela va aller ainsi ?)

intro : The scene takes place in the restaurant in the evening. A mother and her young son are talking around a glass. Nick announces to her mother ( Ashley) his project to live in France and explains the reasons why he plans to leave her mother .

Nick :'' I really wanted to see you to announce you something very important '' He said .

Ashley '' Really ? ok, so, i listen to you '' she answered curiously .

Nick : ''Well, you see, I have decided to leave the house, to go to settle me abroad '' he announces worried .

Ashley : ''Um.. what did you say? Why do you want to leave us? you've got your family , your shool and your comfort here . '' she exclaimed shocked .

Nick : ''yeah .. I mean, you know... i'd like to be independent '' He declared .

Ashley : '' Are you sure that is a good idea ? '' She asked .

Nick '' Of course it is , i'm dying to discover new languages . This is a real opportunity for me to become multi-lingual . Besides , i'll learn about new cultures , I will meet new friends and I'll see a wider world. '' He answered .

Ashley : '' Er.. , the point is how will you live wihtout our money ? I'm sorry but,  if you want to be independant you'll have to look after yourself '' She warned .

Nick '' Let met think .. I'm going to work everyday . You know how to be bilingual is an advantage to find a job. Furthermore this will improve my cv. Then I want to learn to live with the minimum, You should not think I need your money, I am able to live without it '' He declared angrily .

Ashley '' so , imagine you could not integrate a diferent culture... Aren't you  afraid of being homesick  ? '' She insisted .

Nick '' Um.. Oh, please, come on, mum, I am not so stupid ! , Justly , this journey will make me more self-confident and mature . You know , without my family , i'll have to succeed by my own. So , it will allow me to know people  better and I will learn to open my mind to the others . '' He stated .

Ashley : ''okay , but,  can you understand what I'm feeling? Is this journey so important to youthat you can decide to abandon your family without any kind of regret ? '' She asked worried .

Nick '' Um .. yes, it is important ! I hoped you could understand that I need to live a new experience, it's just normal... I mean, I won't stay  at home all my life long, and...the time has come now...I know that it can be hard to you to admit that your little boy is becoming a man, but I'm sorry, here we are, and  I love you all,  don't worry, mum,  I won't forget you,  any of you, ; But please, try to feel happy for me, try to think "oh my god, my boy is now able to live his life, I am so happy to see  that we have prepared him to this '' .

Ashley : ''You're really decided to go abroad , aren't you ? '' She asked anxiously .

Nick '' yeah , definitely '' He answered .

Ashley '' So , i support your project but can you promise that if  within one year it doesn't work , then you won't go on this way, and  that in this case you will return home, okay ? '' She proposed .

Nick '' Um.. okay no problem '' He replied happy .