Notion myths and heroes

Bonjour,

Dans un premier temps, je me suis permis d'apporter quelques corrections à ton introduction :

Today, I'm going to talk about ( ou deal with, formule plus idiomatique ) the notion of myths and heroes . A hero is a person who have ( HAS ) courage, selfeness, humility. He has a lot of qualities and he is an example for our society. A hero have ( HAS ) not obligatory ( necessarily ) power all people can be heroes such as firemen , policemen or soldiers.
However, have possibility a heroes or villains have super power ( utilises une structure simple : Sujet + Verbe + Complément : Heroes, or villains can have superpowers ) in the book or movie of Harry Potter ( Place ce groupe de mots en début de phrase ). They have magic power, and ( tu peux ici supprimer le and ) it's ( an ) other wordl in England and Harry Potter wants to fight evil forces.
There are also myths is story true or not, most of the time exort our religion , our greek mythology than Hercules. ( lien logique faible entre cette phrase et la problématique, essaies de trouver une idée, une déduction, un exemple qui te permet de faire la transition avec la question qui suit ) So therefore ( tu peux ici enlever therefore ) we may wonder to what extent heroes are necessarily famous ? To answer this question, I have decided to present several document studied in class.
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On the other hand, the second document will explain that ….
Finally, it will lead me to present my personal hero and villains who are Harry Potter and Voldemort.
In my view a hero is not necessary a hero like this, is villains too. In general a villain have super power but he useq them ill-advisedly. And all people we talk about are heroes never about villains. So I want to ask why do we love more : heroes or villains ? A villain is similar to a hero but he is evil. It can we given a desire to become attached to the villain. ( A quoi correspond ce sujet ? Est-ce l'angle choisi par le prof pour traiter la notion ? Quelle est sa place dans l'exposé ? )
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Partie2 :
I'd like to talk about famous fictional characters to show that vilains maybe as attractive as heroes. Actually, we don't talk about villains just about heroes but I want to talk why I like a villains. I suppose a villain has a personal problem than Tom Marvolo Riddle who will become Voldemort. He was an abandoned child and misunderstood. Tom is a very brillante student and oustanding wizard for his age, but i have a complex of superiority . He has a goal too to become the most powerful wizard and he want to be immortal. Voldemort created his army which is called Death Eaters they have essentially their two parent's are wizards a blood pure . Such as Harry Potter, Voldemort have goal and he determinted too. Harry look like Voldemort when he is angry and all professor in Hogwarts find that they have the same intellectual and magical capacities. So heroes are similar to villains. On the one hand Harry Potter is considered to a rôle models for all wizards in the book and people in real life because he too courageous and determinted , and he is a myth all people say his name. His only one survive with Lord Voldemort
 
Conclusion :
I definitely think a hero or villain is not necessarily famous, a people become famous with the media or telecomunication in the world.

- Je ne comprends pas quel est le sujet de cet exposé : ton introduction évoque d'abord la problématique : les héros sont-ils nécessairement célèbres, puis tu dérives sur la distinction entre héros et méchants ...

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