Correction d'erreurs à une réponse de question sur le terrorisme.

Publié le 28 oct. 2011 il y a 12A par Anonyme - Fin › 4 nov. 2011 dans 12A
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Bonjour, j'ai un devoir à faire. Je dois répondre à la question : "what do you think of the 11/9 attacks and their impact ?" (200 mots)
J'ai déjà écrit mon texte mais j'aimerai que quelqu'un puisse me corriger les fautes d'orthographe, de grammaire et surtout de conjugaison et si vous pensez à des choses essentielles que j'aurai oublié de parler ou que je devrais enlever de mon texte!

Je vous remercie d'avance
Bonne journée

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

On september 11th, 2001, America was hit by terrorists attacks.
When the Twin Towers collapsed, I was 6 years old and I didn't understand the importance and consequences of what had happened. I thought it was just the collapse of two towers, I did not know that this was a terrorist attack, I was too young to understand.
Today, I think this is inhumane terrorist act. I'm upseted by 3000 people who's dead and for people have lost a husband, wife, child, parent, friend ...all of them are now dead innocence in vain.
The world tribute to those people who died as with the "Patriot Day".
The attack still has a big impact now as it has frightened the world and changed the world view.It's a important and tragic event on the 21st century. Impacts are large...
The impact is economical because it caused an important slowingdown. But the impact is also and above all moral.
The purpose of destroying the Twin Towers was primarily to scare America. It was a success, unfortunately.
People are petrified, frightened, live in fear despite the many precautions taken to tighten security (as Noble Eagle) and eradicate terrorism that has killed innocents for prevent another tragedy, which caused a deep trauma everywhere in the world.



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Anonyme
Posté le 29 oct. 2011
On september 11th, 2001, America was hit by terrorists attacks.
When the Twin Towers collapsed, I was only 6 years old and I didn't understand the meaning of this event. I thought it was just the collapse of two towers, I did not know that this was a terrorist attack, I was really too young to understand this.
Today, I think this is an inhuman terrorist act. I'm upset by the fact that 3000 people died and that people lost a wife, a husband, a child or a relative there. ...
The world paid a tribute to those people. It was the "Patriot Day".
The attack still has a big impact now as it has frightened the world and changed the world view.It's an important and tragic event of the 21st century. Impacts are huge.
They are economic because it caused an important slowdown. But the other impact is also and above all moral.
The purpose of destroying the Twin Towers was above all to frighten America. It was a success, unfortunately.
People are petrified, frightened, live in fear despite of many precautions taken to tighten security (as Noble Eagle) and eradicate terrorism to prevent another tragedy, which would cause a deep trauma everywhere in the world.

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