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Bonjour, c'est encore moi. J'ai un examen en septembre donc je m'entraîne toujours à écrire des textes.
La consigne est: "Le temps a passé, tu t'es marié, tu as eu des enfants, des petits enfants qui vivent à Londres (maman anglaise). Tu regrettes de les voir rarement et l'idée te vient de raconter ta vie par écrit. Pense à toutes les grandes étapes de ta vie, les grands évenements mais aussi des anecdotes qui t'ont marqué et que tu voudrais partager avec eux."
et j'aimerais qu'on me corrige mes fautes et qu'on me les explique pour que je progresse :) si mes phrases sont trop simples, vous pouvez les changer en une tournure plus compliqué.. c'est mon point faible, mes phrases sont trop simples !merci !
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Dear Serdar,
How are you? I hope your familiy is doing well ! I wish see you more often so I am writing you a letter to share with you the big events of my life because I'm a little bit nostalgic.
I was born on 17th June 1940 in a very small town in the North of Belgium. I was a big baby with dark and straight hair. The whole family lived in a very small flat near the center: there were only four rooms. There were one living room, one bathroom, one kitchen and one bedroom where I, my parents and my old brother sleeped together. My mother sayed that I was a quiet child and that I cried not very often.
At school I was a good student. I chose economical in options because I wanted to be a notary but at the University I finally chose to study law to become a lawyer. This year I also met Hüsün, your grandfather. He was a friend of my best friend. He was 2 years older than me and had a job in a factory. In the beginning we were just friends but then we become closer and I fall in love with him and him too. After my 4 years of law studies I found also a job and after that he proposed me to get married so we got married. It was the 23th Juli 1863. It was the best day of my life. We moved to Brussels in a big house. We were far away of our parents but from times to times they wame to see us.
Three years after our wedding we had 2 beautiful boys: Necati (your father) and Osman. We were very happy. To become a parent is a beautiful sensation !
At 19 years old Necati got married and at 21 years old Osman got married. A few years later they had kids. I couldn't be happier, my grand children are the best things I have in my life. I'm proud of my familly.
So It's what I wanted to tell you. I love you and take care of yourself!
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At school I was a good student. I chose economical in options because I wanted to be a notary but at the University (si tu veux parler de l’université soit tu ne le traduis pas et tu fais ainsi reference au système éducatif français, soit tu traduis et tu fais référence au système anglais, si je ne me trompe pas college) I finally chose to study law to become a lawyer. That year I also met Hüsün, your grandfather. He was a friend of my best friend. He was 2 years older than me and had a job in a factory. At the beginning we were just friends but then we became closer and I fell in love with him and him too. After my 4 years of law studies I found also a job and after that he asked me if I wanted to marry him and I accepted. It was the 23th July 1863. It was the best day of my life. We moved to Brussels in a big house. We were far away of our parents but they sometimes came to see us.
Three years after our wedding we had 2 beautiful boys: Necati (your father) and Osman. We were very happy. To become a parent is something wonderful!
At 19 years old Necati got married and at 21 years old Osman did too. A few years later they had kids. I couldn't be happier, my grandchildren are the best things I have had in my life. I'm proud of my family.
So it’s what I wanted to tell you. I love you and take care of yourself!
Remarque:
I have had (ici on met le present perfect parce que ce sont les meilleurs choses que le personnage ai eu durant sa vie, c'est un bilan des expériences passé)
Encore une fois cela n'a pas de rapport avec l'anglais mais wow, tes noms sont tellement étrange...
Ahah oui, je les trouve originaux :D
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Dear Serdar,
How are you? I hope your family is doing well! I wish to see you more often so I am writing you a letter to share with you the big events of my life because I'm a little bit nostalgic.
I was born on 17th June 1940 in a very small town in the North of Belgium. I was a big baby with dark straight hair. The whole family lived in a very small flat near the downtown: there were only four rooms. There was a living room, a bathroom, a kitchen and a bedroom where I, my parents and my old brother slept together. My mother said that I was a quiet child and that I didn’t cry very often.
Remarque:
There was (quand tu fais une liste, there was a bedroom, a bathroom... si la première chose dont tu parles n'est qu'en un seul exemplaire tu met there was meme si après tu as par exemple two bathrooms)
Au passage même si ça n'a pas de rapport avec l'anglais un 4 pièces c'est déjà vachement grand pour un appartement!!
Merci ! Toujours par rapport aux verbes, pourquoi il faut ecrire slept et pas l'autre forme ? Meme question pour didn't cry.
Alors pour sleep, c'est parce qu'il fait parti des verbes irréguliers ( http://www.profdanglais.com/verbes-irreguliers-anglais/liste-complete-des-verbes-irreguliers.php )
Pour didn't cry c'est une phrase négatif au passé tout ce qu'il y a de plus normal (did+not+verbe)
Mais moi j'avais mis ...I cried :(
I cried aurait était bon si ça avait été une phrase affirmative. :)
Oh et si tu n'as plus de questions pense bien à cloturer ton devoir.
D'accord ! Là je suis encore en train d'ecrire un texte donc je vais cloturee celui-ci et en ouvrir un autre. Merci encore !