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Bonjour, je cherche comment améliorer mon exposé (qui doit durer 5 minutes environ ...). Si vous pouviez m'aider à le corriger ça serait super. Merci d'avance. Yasmine.
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before I start my two minutes challenge, I want you to know that if you are too sensitive you should not watch the pictures that I’m going to show you during my presentation. It’s not for the faint of heart.So, Today I will present you a movie that I saw two weeks ago with a friend. It's called Final Destination Five. This movie,written by Eric Heisserer and directed by Steven Quale is the fifth of the saga. This thriller and supernatural film use the third dimension. So first I will summarize the movie’s story and then, I will tell you why I liked this movie and I will try to convince you to go to the cinema in order to see finale destination five.
So, on a business trip, Sam Lawton, an employed had a vision, more precisely a premonition. He saw that the bridge was going to collapse. That’s why when the bridge began to collapse; Sam rushed all of his friends to safety. Thanks to him, all his friends survived the accident. Few days later, a strange man called William Bludworth tells the survivors that there is no way you can cheat the death and warned the group that death is after them and that it’s inevitable. So, during the film we can see the survivors die one by one. This is the story of the movie, it’s a little bit complicated so I hope I was clear.
To my mind, I really liked this movie because I found it full of suspense and full of tension. I enjoyed the great use of the thrid dimension and the sens of humour. However, it’s unfortunately not the grimmest film I’ve seen but it may be the most inexplicable one. Final Destination five is maybe the last movie of the saga but it’s certainly not the least. If you like blood, surnatural and thrillers, you should see this movie. Trust me you will not regret it !
In closing I would show you the trailer of this great movie.
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Bonjour,
Je trouve que c'est très bien écrit, seulement quelques fautes:
ligne 7 : "use the third dimension" ==> "useS he third dimension".
ligne 9 : "in order to see" ==> in order c'est bien formulé mais ça fait un peu tro lourd je trouve, je mettrais plutôt : "to see final desination five".
pour le reste je mettrais plutôt : "The story starts like thyis : While Sam Lawton was on a tipical business trip, he suddenly had a vision. He saw that the bridge he was on was going to collapse, and that's when his vision became a premonition because the bridge really started to crumble; he rushed all his friends to safety. Thanks to him , all his friends survived the accident. Few days later, a strange man called William Bludworth tells the survivors that there is no way you can cheat(/escape from)death and that they would shortly realise that.
Après j'ai pensé que tu pourrais t'arrêter là et dire quelque chose comme:
"So if you want to see if this strange man was right, you should really go and watch Final Destination Five. I hope I was clear as the story is a little bit complicated.
The reasons why I really liked this movie are because I found it full of suspense and full of tension. i enjoyed the great use of the third dimension and the sens of humour. However, it's unfortunatly not the grimmest film I've seen but it may be the most inexplicable one. Final Destination Five might be the last movie of the saga but it's certainly not the least. If you like blood, surnatual and thrillers, you should see the movie. Trust me you will not regret it!
In closing I will show you the trailer of this great movie!"
En tout cas, tu m'as convaincue d'allé le voir! :p :D
Je trouve que c'est très bien écrit, seulement quelques fautes:
ligne 7 : "use the third dimension" ==> "useS he third dimension".
ligne 9 : "in order to see" ==> in order c'est bien formulé mais ça fait un peu tro lourd je trouve, je mettrais plutôt : "to see final desination five".
pour le reste je mettrais plutôt : "The story starts like thyis : While Sam Lawton was on a tipical business trip, he suddenly had a vision. He saw that the bridge he was on was going to collapse, and that's when his vision became a premonition because the bridge really started to crumble; he rushed all his friends to safety. Thanks to him , all his friends survived the accident. Few days later, a strange man called William Bludworth tells the survivors that there is no way you can cheat(/escape from)death and that they would shortly realise that.
Après j'ai pensé que tu pourrais t'arrêter là et dire quelque chose comme:
"So if you want to see if this strange man was right, you should really go and watch Final Destination Five. I hope I was clear as the story is a little bit complicated.
The reasons why I really liked this movie are because I found it full of suspense and full of tension. i enjoyed the great use of the third dimension and the sens of humour. However, it's unfortunatly not the grimmest film I've seen but it may be the most inexplicable one. Final Destination Five might be the last movie of the saga but it's certainly not the least. If you like blood, surnatual and thrillers, you should see the movie. Trust me you will not regret it!
In closing I will show you the trailer of this great movie!"
En tout cas, tu m'as convaincue d'allé le voir! :p :D
Today I am going to present you a movie that...
film uses
I am going to summarize the story of the movie
employee et non employed
si tu racontes déjà au passé il faut mettre au passé
ainsi il faut dire : a strange man called William told the surivors that there was no way you could cheat death and warned the group that death was after them and it was unavoidable.
the sense of humour.
the most unexplainable
au lieu de inexplicable
film uses
I am going to summarize the story of the movie
employee et non employed
si tu racontes déjà au passé il faut mettre au passé
ainsi il faut dire : a strange man called William told the surivors that there was no way you could cheat death and warned the group that death was after them and it was unavoidable.
the sense of humour.
the most unexplainable
au lieu de inexplicable
Moi je mettrais I hope I was cleared au lieu de clear, après je ne suis pas certaine à 100%
non non ce n'est pas I hope I was cleared (clear est un adjectif pas un verbe dans cette phrase)
Can you clear the table? C'est un verbe
The sky is clear (c'est un adjectif)
Can you clear the table? C'est un verbe
The sky is clear (c'est un adjectif)
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Sam Lawton, an EMPLOYEE (on utilise la terminaison participe passé français dans ce cas rare).
A few days later ("few" veut dire peu alors que "a few" veut dire quelques).
No way you can cheat death (pas d'article).
Great use of 3D (encore).
SensE of humour.
Unfortunately not the grimmest film ? (tu veux dire que ce n'est malheureusement pas le film le plus glauque que tu aies vu ?)
Voilà - bon travail et bonne chance ;-)