Me corriger svp

Publié le 10 déc. 2011 il y a 12A par Anonyme - Fin › 12 déc. 2011 dans 12A
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I really like the movie Avatar for many reasons. First of all, the story is original and is about a Paraplegic war veteran; Jake Sully is brought to another planet called Pandora in place of his brother with the promise of getting his legs back if he helps the government on a mission. Pandora is inhabited by a primitive race called the Navy and Jake is sent in to learn their ways so that he can help relocate them and the humans can take over. The special effects are stunning beyond belief. You really have the feeling you are on Pandora and you are taking part in the story! This movie is also like a video game on a grand scale The performance of the actors is great notably Zoe Saldana who gave an especially emotional and strong performance and you never even saw her real face. the only thing bad about the movie was how long it is. It lasted more than two hours. So this was a bit too long for me! But James Cameron came up with a brilliant idea that turned into Avatar!

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

me corriger seulement s'il ya des fautes aussi non s'abstenir svp et me regarder un tout petit peu la ponctuation



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Anonyme
Posté le 10 déc. 2011
Bonjour, voici ma proposition de correction de ta présentation. J'ai mis quelques petites anotations pour avoir plus de précisions sur ce que tu voulais dire, ne sachant pas vraiment ce que tu voulais dire par là.

I really like the movie Avatar for many reasons. First of all, the story is original and DEALS WITH a Paraplegic war veteran. Jake Sully is brought to another planet called Pandora,


in place of his brother (veux-tu dire "au lieu de son frère"? = "instead of his brother"?)


with the promise of getting his legs back if he helps the government on a mission. Pandora is inhabited by a primitive race called the Navy, and Jake is sent OVER THERE to learn

their ways (que veux-tu dire par "their ways"?)

so that he WILL BE ABLE TO relocate them (ils veulent en faire quoi?). The special effects are stunning beyond belief. INDEED, you really have the feeling you are on Pandora SO THAT you are taking part in the story! MOREOVER, this movie is also like a video game on a grand scale. The performance of the actors is great, notably Zoe Saldana'S, who PERFORMED an especially emotional and strong ROLE EVEN IF YOU HAVE NEVER SEEN her real face. TO ME, the only NEGATIVE POINT about the movie was how long it LASTED: more than two hours, SOMETHING too long for me! HOWEVER, James Cameron came up with a brilliant idea that turned into Avatar!

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