A corriger svp pour le 10/01

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour, je devais faire un exercice, écrire sur notre futur personnel (inventer) et je vous demande si vous pouvez le corriger car bien sur c'est noté, Merci d'avance voici le texte que j'ai fait:

To begin with, i would like to make a lot of new friends at high school. Then, I want working at school to do the job I want to achieve. After that, I hope to go to college to study commerce. In my twenties, I dream to succeed in life and travel around the world at least once. In my thirties, I'll start my own business and I hope its going well. In my forties, my company will become so successful that I can sell it and make a great holiday! And in my fifties, I intend to travel and do all my wildest dreams (for example go to Japan) !! Finally, I may spend some time with my family in Tahiti and Costa Rica because I offered them a holiday !

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

J'ai fait l'exercice que m'a était demandé de faire. Je vous demande de le corriger si il y a des faute d'orthographe, merci d'avance.