Faire une description de soi en anglais

Publié le 11 nov. 2011 il y a 12A par Anonyme - Fin › 22 oct. 2016 dans 7A
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Sujet du devoir

Voilà, tout est dans le titre. J'ai un devoir (noté) dans lequel je dois me présenter ainsi que mes hobbies, ce que j'aime, n'aime pas etc..., je suis plutôt bonne en anglais mais la prof est très sévère donc j'aimerais vos aides et je vous en serais très reconnaissante =)

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

First, my name is Solène but my friend called me So. I was born on the 16th april 1996 in Mulhouse. I live in the small town near Colmar: Mulhouse. My mother don't work so she is housewhife, my father is doctor. I have got 1 sister and 1 brother, my sister is very hardworking however my brother and me we are very lazy. At school my favourite subject is History because i have good marks and History impressive. I don't know yet what I'd like to do later but I'd rather practise the doctor before my father. Then I hate sport because i'm lazy i prefer watching Tv or playing on the computer because I'm geek on computer, I'm fond of chating in the topic with my virtuel friends. Also, I have never been to England but I want so much so later I would going however i went in Turkey, Germany, Danemark to my mind the most beautifull countrie in Turkey, Germany, Danemark was Turkey it's was stuning and it's was unforgetable travel.


 


Je peux dire quoi d'autre ? Si vous avez des idées n'hésitez pas, et si j'ai des fautes SVP corrigez les moi... Merci beaucoup à tous ceux qui ont pris la peine de lire <3<3<3 bisous ;)




8 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 11 nov. 2011

Je propose quelques corrections pour cette présentation en anglais :


I live in a small town near Colmar


My mother doesn't work / doesn't have a job / is jobless


housewife


my father is a doctor


one brother and one sister


my sister is very hardworking whereas my brother and I are very lazy


At school, (...)


I have good marks


History impressive : problème de sens que voulez vous dire exactement ?


I'd rather practise the doctor before my father : problème de sens, que voulez vous dire ?


Then I hate sport : Etrange utilisation du then, autant ne pas le mettre.


Because I am lazy and I prefer (...) because I'm a (true)/ (real) geek


I'm fond of chatting (problème de sens : "in the topic" que voulez vous dire?)


virtual


Also, I have never been to England but I want so much so later


I would going however i went in Turkey, Germany, Danemark to my mind the most beautifull countrie in Turkey, Germany, Danemark was Turkey it's was stuning and it's was unforgetable travel.


Refaites ce passage en plusieurs phrases, il est trop confus


Although I've never been to England I'd love to go there when I'm older.


I've already been to Turkey, Germany and Denmark (ce n'est pas daté donc vous mettrez le present perfect)


Turkey is the most beautiful country I have ever seen. It was a stunning and unforgetable trip / journey.


C'est dèjà pas mal tout ça.

Anonyme
Posté le 11 nov. 2011
Merci beaucoup ! quand j'ai dis history impressive j'ai oublier de dire le "me" pour dire l'histoire m'impressione.
I'd rather practise the doctor before my father: je voulais dire Je fairais plutôt docteur peut-être comme mon père.
I'm fond of chatting : je voulais dire dans les discussions/forum

;)
Anonyme
Posté le 11 nov. 2011
but I would like to become a doctor like my father.
I like chatting with my friends about everything.
Tu peux dire si tu as des animaux, si tu aimes lire et quels livres tu as lus ?
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Anonyme
Posté le 12 nov. 2011
I'm impressed by History / I think History is impressive

I'd like to be a doctor, like my father

I enjoy / like / love chatting with my friends on the internet.
Anonyme
Posté le 12 nov. 2011
Okey ,merci beaucoup je n'avais pas penser à préciser cela ;)
My favourite book is benjamin button
I had read Benjamin Button by (je sais plus le nom de l'auteur;) ) it's was faboulous to my mind is the best book in the world because it's not long and easy for reading also it's an fantastique book it's my favourite subject (le genre du livre et son sujet)
c'est juste ? si vous pouvez me corriger si vous n'êtes pas occupé ,si vous avez le temps bien sûre .
Anonyme
Posté le 12 nov. 2011
C'est pas mal dans l'ensemble, mais je me permet de corriger quelque petits trucs, qui te permettront peut etre de te demarquer par rapport aux autres :

First of all, I'm Solène. But my friends call me So. I was born on the 16th april 1996, in Mulhouse. I'm living in a small town near Colmar wich is called Mulhouse. My mother is a housewife, and my father is a doctor. I've got one brother, and one sister who's very hardworking as against my brother and me. I'm rather like my brother, so lazy. At school my favorite subject is history.In this subject, I am very passionate and attentive to, what brings me good marks ! I'm not sure of my future cursus, but i would like make medecine's study, like my father. You have to know that i hate Sports, like i told you im very lazy, so i prefer watch tv, or talk with my virtual friends on chats. I'm found of my computer.

Although i'e neer been to England, i've travelled a lot. I went to Turkey, Germany, Danemark. My favourite trip was Turkey. I loved this travel, it was an unforgetable trip, i would never forget.

Voila miss! J'espere t'avoir aidée
Anonyme
Posté le 12 nov. 2011
My favourite book is the curious case of Benjamin Button written by F Scott Fitzgerald. It is the most interesting book I have ever read. It is not too long and is easy to read. It is a great book and I like the topic of this book.
Anonyme
Posté le 12 nov. 2011
Merci beaucoup,et ça sa vient du fond du coeur!!


Merci beaucoup à tous celle ou ceux qui on prit le temps de lire et même répondre. RE MERCI BEAUCOUP thanks you!!

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