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Publié le 23 sept. 2010 il y a 13A par Anonyme - Fin › 27 sept. 2010 dans 13A
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I appear my name is Temir cemile. I live in Béligneux. I am in fifth year of high school in La Boisse. I am 15 years old. I am of origin Turk. I have no annimaux domestic.
My favorite hobby is the music.
My qualities are that I am kind because I always want to please the others, I am always tuned to listening the others when there is a problem, I am sincere and honest. My defects are that I am a maniac and I do not support general stores and the dirt.
I like going out outside with my friends, to go shopping and to go to the cinema I do not like
playing football because I think that it is more a sport for boy.
I would like to be nursing later.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

I appear my name is Temir cemile. I live in Béligneux. I am in fifth year of high school in La Boisse. I am 15 years old. I am of origin Turk. I have no annimaux domestic.
My favorite hobby is the music.
My qualities are that I am kind because I always want to please the others, I am always tuned to listening the others when there is a problem, I am sincere and honest. My defects are that I am a maniac and I do not support general stores and the dirt.
I like going out outside with my friends, to go shopping and to go to the cinema I do not like
playing football because I think that it is more a sport for boy.
I would like to be nursing later.



5 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 23 sept. 2010
I appear my name is Temir cemile. I live in Béligneux. I am in fifth year of high school in La Boisse. I am 15 years old. I am from turk. I've no pets.
My favorite hobbie is the music.
My qualities are that I am kind because I always want to please the others, I am always tuned to listening the others when there is a problem, I am sincere and honest. My defects are that I am a maniac and I do not support general stores and the dirt.
I like going outside with my friends,to do shopping and to go to the cinema I don't like
playing football because I think that it is a boy's sport.
I would like to be nursing.


Anonyme
Posté le 23 sept. 2010
fifth ne secris pas comme sa
apres le years il y a un old
il y a jamai un la evand un mot anglais
animaux ce prononce pets
je pense que tu a pas mal de faute recomence ton texte aler aurevoir
Anonyme
Posté le 23 sept. 2010
Salut!
Déjà ton texte à l'air d'avoir été traduit "mot à mot" si tu dis i appear my name traduit mot à mot c'est correct mais dit devant un anglais ça ne veut rien dire.

Donc:
I'm going to introduce myself. My name is Temir Cemile. I live in Béligneux. I'm in 9th grade in La Boisse school's. I'm 15 years old. I have Turkish origins. I don't pets. Music is my favourite hobby. I think that I'm kind and helpful ( parce que ta phrase veut dire: je pense que je suis gentil parce que je veux toujours aider les gens alors autant dire que tu es serviable et gentil c'est plus simple et compréhensif.), i'm always here to listen people when there's a problem, i'm sincere and honest but i'm too maniac and i don't support general stores and the dirt. I like hanging out with my friends, going to the cinema and shopping but i don't like football because i think it's more a boy sport. When i get older i would like to be a nursery.

Voilà et bon courage ;)
Anonyme
Posté le 23 sept. 2010
Voilà et bon courage ;)
@marvinom13
My favorite hobbie is the music c'est faut on dit "a hobby" "many hobbies" ;)
Anonyme
Posté le 25 sept. 2010
J'ai copié puis corrigé la version de Ginnyy:

I'm going to introduce myself. My name is Temir Cemile. I live in Béligneux. I'm in 9th grade in La Boisse. I'm 15 years old. I have Turkish origins. I don't have pets. Music is my favourite hobby. I think that I'm kind and helpful. I'm always ready to listen to people when they have problems, i'm sincere and honest but I'm obsessive about tidyness and I can't stand neither general stores(???) nor dirt. I like hanging out with my friends, going to the cinema and shopping but I don't like football because I think it's a sport for boys.
I would like to be a nurse.

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