lettre anglais à corriger

Publié le 27 janv. 2011 il y a 13A par Anonyme - Fin › 31 janv. 2011 dans 13A
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Sujet du devoir

John Winterhayes wrote a letter to his mother when he arrived in new South Wales.
Imagine the letter he wrote her.You must mention:
a)his feelings when he left England
b)how long the journey took
c)the weather,the food,other problems
d)his feelings during the journey

e)arriving in Australia.

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Monday 23 January 1835

Dear mother,


I traveled by ship from England to Australia,I was sent to Autralia at New South Wales in a prison colony by British magistrate.I am send here for seven years.When I quitted England,I was scared and sad about quitting my family and my country.I've been transported by coach from London to a chip that was going to Australia;the journey was difficult,I experienced water difficulties,a bad weather and I suffered in the famine during the travel because there wasn't any food on the ship.The travel was unpleasent and terrifying because there was a terrible storm.I was scared and seasick at the same time and I was both afraid and hungry.My journey was too long due to the bad weather and food's problems,it tooked at least three months.
When I arrived to Australia,I have been sent to prison colony in New South Wales,I've been transported to that place by coach.I felt frightened because it wasn't my country, I was also sad because I've been separated from my family,I miss you already mom! you and my brothers too!

Your dear son

John Winterhayes.



3 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 27 janv. 2011
bonjour
tu as confondu le présent et l'imparfait 2ème phrase I was send here...
on ne dit pas when I quitted ; mais when I left, je suppose que tu veux dire quitter
about le leaving...
bateau is ship avec un s; unpleasant (avec un a)
I've been transported (attention ce n'est pas le bon temps, tu devrais parler à l'imparfait)idem I've been separated

Anonyme
Posté le 27 janv. 2011
merci de ton aide!je réécris:

Monday 23 January 1835

Dear mother,


I traveled by ship from England to Australia,I was sent to Autralia at New South Wales in a prison colony for seven years by the British magistrate.When I lift England,I was scared and sad about leaving my family and my country.I was transported by coach from London to a chip that was going to Australia;the journey was difficult,I experienced water difficulties,a bad weather and I suffered in the famine during the travel because there wasn't any food on the ship.The travel was unpleasent and terrifying because there was a terrible storm.I was scared and seasick at the same time and I was both afraid and hungry.My journey was too long due to the bad weather and food's problems,it tooked at least three months.
When I arrived to Australia,I was sent to prison colony in New South Wales,I was transported there by coach.I felt frightened because it wasn't my country, I was also sad because I was separated from my family,I miss you already mom! you and my brothers too!

Your dear son John Winterhayes.

Anonyme
Posté le 27 janv. 2011
si vous pouviez me donner votre avis après rectification.merci.

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