Oral de Bac - Anglais, Terminale

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour ! Pour le bac d'anglais, je dois passer la semaine du 12 mai l'épreuve d'expression orale.

Je voudrais que quelqu'un m'aide avec la première notion qui est "lieux et formes de pouvoir" si possible.

Ma prof nous a donné comme thème l'Inde avec la problématique : Are Indian citizens on an equal footing in modern-day India?

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

J'ai écrit une majorité de la notion mais je trouve ça trop court... Le plan est :

1. Les inégalités entre riches et pauvres
2. les inégalités entre hommes et femmes
3. et enfin un pays qui change.

Voici ce que j'ai écrit :

If we consider that Power is the ability or official capacity to exercise control and authority in a State. We can find it under lot of forms and in every country around the world. In fact, the power can be a Democracy or a Dictatorship.

To illustrate this notion, we have taken India for example and we can wonder if Indian citizens are on an equal footing in modern-day India?

In India there are lots of inequalities among rich and poor. Indeed, the cast system is so unfair: there are not middle class, people are or rich or poor. Furthermore the dowry tradition handicaps the poor people. This practice which forces the family to give sum of money to the future husband’s family makes getting a husband difficult for the poorest girls because they can’t pay.

We saw that 600,000 girls go missing every year: this is the gendercide. The dowry tradition cost far too much for families with daughters. Girls are killed at birth because without money, they will can’t be married.
More than inequalities among rich and poor, there are also inequalities between men and women.

The text “Another Girl” by Shilpi Somaya Gowda is a good example. Since we see a woman who gives birth to a baby girl and her husband clearly wants her to be killed or abandoned. The women have no authority and can do nothing against their husband. That’s why women run away when they can.

Furthermore, most people who work in country’s government are men because the women can’t have the right to work. He’s the husband who decide, he dominate the society. They are the only ones who can work and decide for their family.

However, India is a changing country.

India is a country in evolution. In fact, we seen that farms giving way to factories, ultra-cheap cars being built, and the women were becoming breadwinners through microcredit and decentralized manufacturing. Couples were ending marriages no matter what society thinks. Now, people live lives imagined within own skulls. It’s an improbable rush of hope for this country.

Pouvez-vous me corriger et me donner d'autres idées si possible ? Merci