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Certenly, prison may be a good way of punishment. today, I fell safe when I heard that a rapist, a killer or other criminals of this magnitude is in prison, such as hazardous Marseille 50 who escaped and one was arrested! I also think that prison is a good way to this people think about her offencies and they do feel remorse for example after 25 years in prison for killing a member of ennoxville who obtained his release was converted to Buddhism has extended to the «right path». In France we have already made much progress since the death penalty was abolished! but it is not like that in every country in the world today because the last execution in Iran dates back only to 2009! From my point of view, I think in many years we have made further progress in our legal system.Où j'en suis dans mon devoir
voilà c'est ma première parties de ma dissertation d'anglais et je voudrais savoir si il y a des fautes ? SVP4 commentaires pour ce devoir
48 mots pour une phrase, c'est beaucoup !
Bonjour 1s2,
Ton texte est bien, mais il y a quelques fautes voici le texte avec les corrections:
"CERTAINLY, JAIL may be a good way of punishment. Today, I fell safe when I heard that a rapist, a killer or other criminals of this magnitude ARE in JAIL, such as hazardous Marseille 50 who escaped and THEN GOT arrested! I also think that prison is a good way to this people think about her offencies and they do feel remorse for example after 25 years in prison for killing a member of ennoxville who obtained his release was converted to Buddhism has extended to the «right path». In France we have already made much progress since the death penalty was abolished! But it is not like that in every country in the world today, because the last execution in Iran dates back only to 2009! From my point of view, I think in many years we have made further progress in our legal system."
Cordialement,
Benjamin CNED 3ème
Ton texte est bien, mais il y a quelques fautes voici le texte avec les corrections:
"CERTAINLY, JAIL may be a good way of punishment. Today, I fell safe when I heard that a rapist, a killer or other criminals of this magnitude ARE in JAIL, such as hazardous Marseille 50 who escaped and THEN GOT arrested! I also think that prison is a good way to this people think about her offencies and they do feel remorse for example after 25 years in prison for killing a member of ennoxville who obtained his release was converted to Buddhism has extended to the «right path». In France we have already made much progress since the death penalty was abolished! But it is not like that in every country in the world today, because the last execution in Iran dates back only to 2009! From my point of view, I think in many years we have made further progress in our legal system."
Cordialement,
Benjamin CNED 3ème
merci benjamin et pur docalbus je vais essayer de former des phrase plus courte ;)
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Et où sont les points ! Les phrases sont trop longues. C'est trop difficile à lire. Pour moi, il faudrait faire des phrases plus courtes.
;)