Correction de rédaction

Sujet du devoir

Bonjour j'ai une rédaction a rendre d'anglais est ce que vous pourriez me corriger mes fautes svp je suis tres tres mauvaise en anglais. MERCI D'AVANCE

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

My name is Irma and I will tell you my history.


I was 18 years old when I finish the high school; I passed with 80% upwards. In the same years that graduated, I left life with my
best friend Carla for make me feel more “adult». My parents give me for me 18th Birthday a luxury Penthouse in Manhattan that’s shared with Carla. I was study and life in New York. I have a sister… I had a sister, my little sister was 7 years old-her name was Suri I love my sister she’s was so adorable. My parents were Daniel and Rebecca. My mom was a mom a full time, my father was a millionaire business man, I never past much time with him. My parents are other world but I love them. In this time I was a typical teenager. I was in my world: my friends my sweet boyfriend Luc and … It could have been said that I was happy , I didn’t have a preoccupations my parents paying all. I had all... I could have been said...Time wore like a routine college family boyfriend friends..I Are already in mi 2th years of medicine I still life with Carla but now I life with my boyfriends Luc too. I have 20 years old now and everything’s begin a short time ago precisely 117 days before my sister birthday...My mother had everything organized for my sister Birthday, EVERYTHING was plane, the family diner ( my sister my parents and me) in the Blue Fin at Times Square, (it’s a luxury restaurant at the heart of Manhattan) the same day of her birthday and for the weekend a BIG party with all friends of family, family, my friends and the Suri’s friends. The theme of the party was choosing too; The CIRCUS and specially the CLOWNS Sury love the clowns.
I hate them now...

The CLOWN

107 days before my sister birthday she’s received a letter, not precisely she’s received a postcard in the front I can’t saw a lots of clowns in the back the message of postcard “I will surprise YOU..” my sister was so happy because she love the clowns and she’s called me for said me. My mom thinks that’s a things of my fathers, I thinks the same, who others than him but my father said isn’t him. We’re no
pay attention to postcard because it’s arrived one time. As the days wore on and we’re forget it... Only my sister remember it because she’s had a keep the postal in her room, and because she’s keep others postal that’s an unknown give her (I supposed), all postcard with a clown. The unknown know my sister love the clowns. Suri said nothing, maybe she’s thinks that’s not have an importance... maybe. A month later my sister and my parents too beginning received a postcard every day all same with a clown and the same message “I will surprise YOU...” every day and during 30 days. My sister was very happy she’s beginning collection the postal’s but my mom was angry - why she’s received all-time the same postcard with this mystery message. She began to feel afraid... It’s was absurd. Why can make that... I’m isn’t worry because I think it’s a bad joke not more, so I reassure my mother each day she’s call me.
Fours week without postcard I can confirm with that’s just a bad joke.
But one day 10 days before the family diner, arrived at my penthouse I find at package, when I open the package I find a horrible head of clown with this message “ THE DAY IS AT HAND;YOU WILL DEAD ” I was written with a word of a “ New times” the diary. I was afraid. I don’t call my mom I didn’t want afraid her. I don’t call the police because I think it’s not necessary. I said nothing. In the wore days I finds more packages with the message in the same style. It was terrifying. My mom call me 3 day before the diner family for tell me that since day in home in the windows and door somebody was writing “I KILL YOURS FAMILY YOU MUST PAID” these messages was accompanied with a horrible draw of clowns. Who can make these? I don’t know, I said here “don’t alert the police mom wait after the Suri’s birthday” She’s accept. My father doesn’t know nothings of this story only he know the existence of the first postcard his left in travel work and my mother didn’t want be him worried, he will back for the dinner only and she’s didn’t said nothing until he has here.

The day of dinner arrived, I was call my sister in the morning for witch her the best of birthday. I was prepared I arrived at luxury restaurant in Times Square, My parents and sister was already arrive. I was so happy of see my parents and sister. We dinner sushi the favorite plate of Suri and for the dessert the waitress to bring a fabulous cake decorate with a big number 8-awww my sister was so so happy and we too. Everything go straight fine, it’s was a delicious night with family when suddenly a clown to enter in the restaurant he’s armed with a enormous rifle and in his face a ironic smile everyone beginning shout in the restaurant. We’re was petrify.
The clown head towards we .. I was afraid totally petrify.. The clown shoot with the rifle to kill me mom, and he said “SAID YOU DANIEL I ALERT YOU IF YOU DON’T PAYD I KILL YOU AND YOUR FAMILY” and he laugh , the clown shoot to kill my sister, my father and me this time…

6 months later..
I’m not died, I’m survive .... I hospitalized in a psychiatrist clinic because they said I’m “traumatized” after the tragedy... I don’t think so . I’m here because I’m well here and nobody know my story here, nobody judge me. I waiting for him, for Alex, yes for Alex he’s mi truth love with him I organized the plan for kill me family, stay with the entire fortune of my parents and go .. life like nothing’s happened out of New York.. Yes I organized everything, I pretended everything I never feel afraid I waiting for all I know. I fake even you, you believed me hahahahahahaha is so funny NOW I’m happy I’m free. I just waiting one years and left here, go to Europe, Caraibes I don’t know left for life… maybe someone find this notebook one day I dude I will bury this.. But if someone fined this I will for away New York I will other name and other appearance and Alex too. So it’s all I confessed all and now you know my history.

Irma Notebook
November 4thof 1992