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Dear Sarah,
It was good to hear from you and I'm glad you succeed your exam. Sorry for answering so late, but like you asked I go in trip so I wasn't at home I couldn't answer. Let me explain you. Like you now I told you my mother and me wanted to go to Italy but my father didn't like travel. but my mother said "Darling you must gather ye rosebuds while ye may" So we went to Italy for two week. We take the car and drive over there it's take us two days. Actually were in Tuscany is a region in Central Italy here we were in an hotel with an amazing view over the lake Garda which is the largest lake in Italy. Let alone all the activities they propose indeed there were a swimming pool , a sauna, billiards, a bowling, a tennis court, a room of fitness , a Jacuzzi. And a large dining room and the waiter were nice and funny. The dishes were appetizing and delicious. And we went to see the arena of Verona the city of Romeo and Juliette. We saw the costume and the decorate of the spectacle it was really remarkable. I think it's was the best memory about this holydays. Also I saw the famous The leaning Tower of Pisa because it leaned. And my father took a photo with my sister who made seeming to push the tower it was pretty succeeded. I will show you. The landscapes fill me with wonder it was really outstanding. Now I hope go to Ireland because I like the music and the landscape there are over there. Say hello to your family for me.
I'm looking forward to seeing you soon
xx
Laurane
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Dear Sarah,
It was good to hear from you and I'm glad you PASSED your exam. Sorry for answering so late, but like you asked I WENT in trip so I wasn't at home AND I couldn't answer. Let me explain IT TO you. Like you KNOW, my mother and I wanted to go to Italy but my father dOESN't like TO travel. My mother said "Darling you must gather yOU rosebuds while YOU may" So we went to Italy for two weekS. We tOOK the car and drOve over there. IT TOOK us two days. WE were in Tuscany, a region in Central Italy. We STAYED in an hotel with an amazing view over the lake Garda, which is the largest lake in Italy. BESIDES all the activities they propose, there were a swimming pool , a sauna, billiards, a bowling, a tennis court, a FITNESS COURT AND a Jacuzzi. THERE WAS ALSO a large dining room, and the waiterS were nice and funny.
The MEALS were appetizing and delicious. We went to see the arena of Verona, the city of Romeo and Juliette. The costumeS and the decoraTION of the SHOW WERE really remarkable. I think it was the best memory OF THESE holIdays. I ALSO VISITED the famous Leaning Tower of Pisa. My father took a photo OF my sister who PRETENDED to push the tower WHO LEANED. It was QUITE A succeSS. I will show you. The landscapes fillED me with wonder. It was really outstanding. Now I hope I'LL go to Ireland because I lOVE the music and the landscapeS OVER there. Say hello to your family for me.
I'm looking forward to seeing you soon
xx
Laurane
je te mets les corrections en majuscules.
Dear Sarah,
It was good to hear from you and I'm glad you PASSED your exam. Sorry for answering so late, but like you asked I WENT in trip so I wasn't at home AND I couldn't answer. Let me explain IT TO you. Like you KNOW, my mother and I wanted to go to Italy but my father dOESN't like TO travel. My mother said "Darling you must gather yOU rosebuds while YOU may" So we went to Italy for two weekS. We tOOK the car and drOve over there. IT TOOK us two days. WE were in Tuscany, a region in Central Italy. We STAYED in an hotel with an amazing view over the lake Garda, which is the largest lake in Italy. BESIDES all the activities they propose, there were a swimming pool , a sauna, billiards, a bowling, a tennis court, a FITNESS COURT AND a Jacuzzi. THERE WAS ALSO a large dining room, and the waiterS were nice and funny.
The MEALS were appetizing and delicious. We went to see the arena of Verona, the city of Romeo and Juliette. The costumeS and the decoraTION of the SHOW WERE really remarkable. I think it was the best memory OF THESE holIdays. I ALSO VISITED the famous Leaning Tower of Pisa. My father took a photo OF my sister who PRETENDED to push the tower WHO LEANED. It was QUITE A succeSS. I will show you. The landscapes fillED me with wonder. It was really outstanding. Now I hope I'LL go to Ireland because I lOVE the music and the landscapeS OVER there. Say hello to your family for me.
I'm looking forward to seeing you soon
xx
Laurane
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EX : "Like you know, I told you..."
= Comme tu le sais, je t'ai dis que ...
Tu n'as pas besoin de dire "I told you..."
Est-ce que tu comprends?
EX : "Like you know, I told you..."
= Comme tu le sais, je t'ai dis que ...
Tu n'as pas besoin de dire "I told you..."
Est-ce que tu comprends?
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Two weeks.
We were.
The landscape feel me.
I hope to go to Ireland.
Voila jai essayer de t'aider,bonne chance. :D