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Have you ever had to evercome an obstacle in your life ? say what happened and how you handled the situation.Je voudrais savoir si ma redaction comporte des fautes, et eventuellement les corrigées.
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Life would be so easy and so nice without obstacles and without tests to be overcome but dan daily life it is not case, life is seeded with difficulty to which it is necessary to make face. On my six-year-old, I have known a real obstacle where it a to cancel that I fight with my feelings. Indeed with l' six years i have lost my grandparents, that me caused a vacuum and an immense difficulty to accept the inaceptable then with the wire of the months and years i have been able to live again and acepter death.In the announcement of the decease of my grandparents from the top of my six years, a lot of questions and incomprehension bumped into each other in my head. My parents tried to protect me from shock while explaining me the death of my grandparents but I did not want to understand. In the depths of me I did not want all this to stop but life is sometimes cruel and it is necessary to make him face. It is so over the years, thanks to help of my parents, whom I could understand and accept this lack. I could then share mourning with my family and turn me to healing. This healing is therefore crossed by dialogue and numerous exchanges with young persons and adults.
This event is very painful and this can arrive at everybody. This one changes our life and especially our manner of seeing and thinking of things.
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Life would be so easy and so nice without obstacles and without tests to be overcome but in reality it is not the case. Life is plagued with difficulties which we must necessarily face. When I was 6, I knew a real obstacle [[where it a to cancel that I fight with my feelings]] QUE VEUX TU DIRE?
Indeed when I was 6, I lost my grandparents which caused me a vacuum and a great difficulty to accept the inaceptable. But with the passing of months and years, I have been able to live again and to accept death.
With the announcement of the death of my grandparents, a lot of questions and incomprehensions bumped into each other in my head. My parents tried to protect me from the shock while explaining me the meaning of death but I did not want to understand. [[Deep down I did not want this to stop but life is sometimes cruel and it is necessary to confront it]] QUE VEUX TU DIRE?
Over the years and thanks to my parents, I could understand and accept this lack. I could then mourn with my family and turn to healing. This healing is therefore achived by dialogue and by numerous exchanges with young persons and adults.
This event is very painful and it may happen to everyone. It changes our life and especially our way of seeing and thinking about life.
Il est évident que tu as utilisé un traducteur automatique, du coup je n'arrive pas à comprendre ce que tu as voulu dire dans deux phrases (celles que j'ai encadrées).
Ton texte présente quelque lourdeur mais dans l'ensemble tu réponds bien au sujet. Ta présentation en 3 paragraphes distincts est bien.