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Nowdays a lot of people are attract by unhealthy food and in particular junk food but what's good and bad food exactly ?
In the world there is some people who eat healthy food like vegetables, fruits and a lots of things like that, also this kind of person learn their food habits by there parents and maybe the others parents should take example from them. On the contrary some people's diet is really bad, their eating hamburger, ice-cream, fries, chocolate and they completely forget that eating badly going to be a problem for them later.
People who eating more junk food than the others should learn how to eat less junk food because they will have heart problems, going to become obese, will live less longer than people who have a good lifestyle, also obese's people going to have less health than the ohters.
There is big and famous companies who prompt people to buy their product and in this way they will have more money than their competitor companies. There use characters who looks like sympathetic for encourage them to buy again and again ! The industry doesn't care about people's health because if they really care they should stop promote advert for junk food. It's only one of the reason why people become obese and the others is that some country are really poor and citizens can't eat really good and healthy food so instead of that they eating in the fast food.
Fortunately some people and organization decided to makes people aware of what the industry makes us become and find a solution to stop that for good ! They set up program for the child with guidelines like " You should eat properly for your health". They organize conference for attrack gouvernment's attention and with that they succeed and awareness campaign were put in place in the school. In sum the country with a big percentage should take example from the others.
Today a lot of children doesn't have a good nutrition but things are put in place for the better of them.
But the best advice that I could ever tell you is that you should eat what's you want in small quantity and just find a balance between your body, your mind and your health.
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Nowadays a lot of people are attracted by unhealthy food and in particular junk food but what's good and bad food exactly ?
In the world there are some people who eat healthy food like vegetables, fruits and a lots of things like that, also this kind of person learn their food habits by there parents and maybe the others parents should take example from them.
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Nowdays a lot of people are attract by unhealthy food and in particular junk food but what's good and bad food exactly ?
In the world there is some people who eat healthy food like vegetables, fruits and a lot of things like that, also this kind of person learn their eating habits [= habitudes alimentaires] by there parents and maybe the others parents should take example from them. On the contrary some people's diet is really bad, they eating hamburger, ice-cream, fries, chocolate and they completely forget that bad eating going to be a problem for them later.
People who eating more junk food than the others should learn how to eat less junk food because they will have heart problems, going to become pursy [become est un verbe d'état donc on place un adj), will live less longer than people who have a good lifestyle, also obese's people going to have less health than the others.
There is big and famous companies who prompt people to buy their product and in this way they will have more money than their competitor companies. There use characters who looks like sympathetic for encourage them to buy again and again ! The industry doesn't care about people's health because if they really care that they should stop promote advert for junk food. It's only one of the reason why people become pursy and the others is that some country are really poor and citizens can't eat really good and healthy food so instead of that they eating in the fast food.
Fortunately some people and organization decided to make people aware of what the industry makes us become and find a solution to stop that for good ! They set up program for the child with guidelines like " You should eat properly for your health". They organize conference for attrack gouvernment's attention and with that they succeed and awareness campaign were put in place in the school. In sum the country with a big percentage should take example from the others.
Today a lot of children doesn't have a good nutrition but things are put in place for the better of them.
But the best advice that I could ever tell you is that you should eat that you want in small quantity and just find a balance between your body, your mind and your health.