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Since 2014, trafficking of animals is the fourth illegal exchange in the world.
We cannot accept that ; take for example many puppies and kittens from Eastern Europe, they are transported in different countries without water and food. Moreover, these pets are separated from their mothers ; they aren't wean (sevré) and can be ill or have rabies (la rage).
But also the coasts sales (ventes de fourrures) from wild animals on the road to extinction, ivory traffic, the hunting, ...

In spite of anti-poaching (anti-braconnage) squad, customs (douane), people must be made aware of the problem. Indeed, the extinction of many animal species can turn to a real disaster.

You should support this cause. Make a donation at our charity WWF ! Set up a petition ! Become volunteer ! Why not to buy stuffed animal in our e-boutique ; this money will help us. The future depends of humanity.

Nicolas, voluntary of WWF U.S.



Merci beaucoup c est à rendre jusqu à lundi soir merci bcp !

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

je viens de rédiger mon devoir mais pas sur de la grammaire la syntaxe..