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Write an entry for your own travel blog (imaginary or real). Choose a destination. Find a picture to illustrate your entry and write your blog. Make sure you name the place, describe the setting, the weather, and at least one anecdote or experience. Remember you want people to like your blog, so make it interesting! Describe your feelings, make people want to visit the same place (or stay away from it if it is horrendous!)Où j'en suis dans mon devoir
Cette 1ère partie est déjà corrigée.Early in the morning, I left home. I took the train from Lille to Grenoble. Then, I arrived to Méribel, in the heart of the Alpes in France, by bus. I saw a very beautiful country. The mountains... and the sun shined. The sky was unclouded, it was blue. The tops of the moutains were corved with snow. But in the pastures, the nature grew.
Serait-il possible de corriger cette 2ème partie, merci d'avance.
I was very happy, it's splendid. A lot of flowers, cows and goats in the meadows, houses out of wooden. The village of Méribel is accessible. The people were very nice. I stayed in a hotel. It was the cheapest, and it was comfortable and moderne. During the stay, I visited the cascade of Gebroulaz. I went there,
with cableway. I flew the National Park with its wonderful flowers. I also visited an old farmhouse, where I tasted the cheese regional. It was intersting to talk with these people, and learn a lot about theirs habits and culture. I walked up to the Lake La chambre, where I have a paddle and canoe. It's a good experience for me.
My holiday was fantastic. It's an area to visit, it's beautiful. It worthwhile.
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8 commentaires pour ce devoir
I was very happy, it's splendid.
J'était très heureuse, c'est splendide
I was very happy, it was splendid. Serait plus correct aussi ?
J'était très heureuse, c'était splendide
J'était très heureuse, c'est splendide
I was very happy, it was splendid. Serait plus correct aussi ?
J'était très heureuse, c'était splendide
Voilà la partie que j'ai corrigé. Merci pour les remarques.
I was very happy, it was splendid. A lot of flowers, cows and goats in the meadows, houses out of wooden. The village of Méribel is accessible. People were very nice. I stayed in a hotel. It was the cheapest, and it was comfortable and modern. During the stay, I visited the cascade of Gebroulaz. I went there, with cable car. I flew the National Park with its wonderful flowers. I also visited an old farmhouse, where I tasted the cheese regional. It was intersting to talk with these people, and learn a lot about theirs habits and culture. I walked up to the Lake La chambre, where I have a paddle and canoe. It's a good experience for me.
My holiday was fantastic. It's an area to visit, it's beautiful. It worthwhile.
Voici une fin que j'ai rajoutée, mais je ne sais pas si c'est interressant de la rajouter, ou peut-être n'en ajouter qu'une partie?
It's interressant, because I've learned a lot of things (habits, culture,...) and I've discovered the news areas. The France's rich for the culture.
Merci pour l'aide appoerté Skipper56100.
I was very happy, it was splendid. A lot of flowers, cows and goats in the meadows, houses out of wooden. The village of Méribel is accessible. People were very nice. I stayed in a hotel. It was the cheapest, and it was comfortable and modern. During the stay, I visited the cascade of Gebroulaz. I went there, with cable car. I flew the National Park with its wonderful flowers. I also visited an old farmhouse, where I tasted the cheese regional. It was intersting to talk with these people, and learn a lot about theirs habits and culture. I walked up to the Lake La chambre, where I have a paddle and canoe. It's a good experience for me.
My holiday was fantastic. It's an area to visit, it's beautiful. It worthwhile.
Voici une fin que j'ai rajoutée, mais je ne sais pas si c'est interressant de la rajouter, ou peut-être n'en ajouter qu'une partie?
It's interressant, because I've learned a lot of things (habits, culture,...) and I've discovered the news areas. The France's rich for the culture.
Merci pour l'aide appoerté Skipper56100.
La partie rajoutée, il me semble qu'elle répète trop ce que j'ai déjà dit.
During the stay, I visited the waterfall of Gebroulaz.
Si tu trouves que cela se répète trop, n'en rajoute pas, c'est vrai que cela ressemble à un petit résumé du texte.
salut :)ce que tu a écris est bien j'ai corrigé ce qui me parais incorrect
I was very happy, it was splendid. There were a lot of flowers, cows and goats in the meadows, and log houses . The village of Méribel is accessible and The people there were very nice. I stayed in the cheapest hotel i found but it was still comfortable and modern. During the stay, I visited the waterfall of Gebroulaz. I went there,
by cable car. I flew above the National Park and saw its wonderful flowers. I also visited an old farmhouse, where I tasted the regional cheese. It was interesting to talk with these people, and to learn a lot about their habits and culture. I walked up to the Lake La chambre, where I have a paddle and canoe. It was a good experience for me.
My holiday was fantastic. I advise you to visit this area which is beautiful and worthwhile.
It was interesting, because I've learned a lot of things like habit and culture and I've discovered a new area.
bonne chance !
I was very happy, it was splendid. There were a lot of flowers, cows and goats in the meadows, and log houses . The village of Méribel is accessible and The people there were very nice. I stayed in the cheapest hotel i found but it was still comfortable and modern. During the stay, I visited the waterfall of Gebroulaz. I went there,
by cable car. I flew above the National Park and saw its wonderful flowers. I also visited an old farmhouse, where I tasted the regional cheese. It was interesting to talk with these people, and to learn a lot about their habits and culture. I walked up to the Lake La chambre, where I have a paddle and canoe. It was a good experience for me.
My holiday was fantastic. I advise you to visit this area which is beautiful and worthwhile.
It was interesting, because I've learned a lot of things like habit and culture and I've discovered a new area.
bonne chance !
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-"The people were very nice" Le the n'est peut être pas nécessaire, cela dépend si vous parler de personnes ciblés ou des personnes en général
-"Modern" et non "Moderne" (surement faute de frappe je pense)
- "Cascade" ==> WaterFall serait peut être plus approprié.
-"with cableway" avec des câbles ??? Ce n'est pas plutôt en téléphérique ?
- Alors dans l'ensemble je trouve que c'est vraiment pas mal, il faudrait juste expliquer pourquoi c'est une bonne expérience, préciser pourquoi ... "J'ai découvert une région, un sport que je ne connaissait pas" pour commencer par exemple.