Correction d'une expression écrite

Publié le 18 nov. 2013 il y a 10A par Anonyme - Fin › 25 nov. 2013 dans 10A
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Bonjour pouvez vous me corrigé svp mon expression écrite merci d avance
Shanone, i'm very shocked that you send me . I never thought it. Your boyfriend seemed to be nice.

I understand your pain. You don't merite that please don't say me that it's your fault you are gulty . You must be strong and leave him you can say at me. You are a girl with lots of qualities, your boyfriend not deserve a girl like you .

You are beautiful and young enjoy the life nobody merite a life that and you know that you are smart girl. His acts prove that he's coward . You must have felt afraid and bewildered . Your boyfriend must have felt powerful strong and invincible. Afront him and show him that you are stronger that him. I know you love him nevertheless but you must forget him. Don't spokke to him , ignore him ! Left your home and comme to live with me. I hope my advice will help you ,,,

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

merci davance



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Anonyme
Posté le 18 nov. 2013
Shanone, i'm very shocked ABOUT WHAT YOU SENT me . I never thought ABOUT it. Your boyfriend seemed to be nice.

I understand your pain. You don't DESERVE that. please don't TELL me that it's your fault AND THAT YOU'RE THE ONE GUILTY . You must be strong and leave him . You are a girl with lots of qualities, your boyfriend DOESN'T deserve a girl like you .

You are beautiful and young , YOUS HOULD enjoy life. nobody DESERVES a life LIKE that and you know that you are smart girl. His acts prove that he's A coward . You must have felt afraid and bewildered . Your boyfriend must have felt powerful strong and invincible. Afront him and show him that you are stronger THAN him. I know you love him nevertheless but you must forget ABOUT him. Don't SPEAK to him , ignore him ! LEAVE your home and COME live with me. I hope my advice will help you ,,, (j'ai mis en gros les mots corrects and j'ai supprime les mots qui n'avait pas de sense (:

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