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Your Majesty,

The People in the East End was getting worse : they(pour éviter la répétition) are living in terrible conditions and we feared the worst!. The crime rate was rising. Children were(il faut rester au passé)exploited, and families was living in slums. Children are dying slowly and deadly
diseases such as rubella and chickenpox are a sore in the East End. The population has had enough of these terms and encourage you to act before it gets worse. We have added security to ensure the safety of all East End. The police need to patrol to prevent crime. Other teas(qu'est ce que ca veut dire ?),please send more doctors to the East End to treat the sick people and to prevent any outbreak of disease. We also ask you to build more decent houses for families in need. Beyond these measures, we want to encourage the creation of a law against child exploitation. All these measures are necessary and would stop the violence in the East End and prevent disturbances that might threaten other parts of London. We trust you to find a
solution to all problems mentioned above and are available to discuss about it.


Francehemnt c'est très bien, c'est juste que tu repète bcp "Est End", peut-etre que tu pourrais trouver un synonyme. j'espère avoir assez corrigé.

J'ai oublié de mettre la note : 16/20

Je vois que mon texte d'origine a été altéré et en plus avec des fautes.

je te remercie

si tu le dit