corigement de texte

Publié le 11 févr. 2010 il y a 14A par Anonyme - Fin › 13 févr. 2010 dans 14A
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bonjour , demain j'ai un humm.. coment on va dire euuu.. un texte a faire en anglais , et j'aimerais vous demandez ci vous pouvaient me rendre un petit service , est-ce que vous pourrait me corrigé mais fautes dans mon texte , ci il y a des fautes merci bien ; texte ===>


My room is big , I have a double bed , a desk quite big on the desk I have a computer mobile because I like chat with friends . A great wardrobe with a mirror . I have a shelf for books and magazines and a bedside table for put my alarm clock . I have a CD player . There was carpet in my room . There are posters on the walll know singers and series and fashion because I like singers and serie and fashion . I have picture a class and my family and friends because I love friends and my family .

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

merci de m'aider ;)




My room is big , I have a double bed , a desk quite big on the desk I have a computer mobile because I like chat with friends . A great wardrobe with a mirror . I have a shelf for books and magazines and a bedside table for put my alarm clock . I have a CD player . There was carpet in my room . There are posters on the walll know singers and series and fashion because I like singers and serie and fashion . I have picture a class and my family and friends because I love friends and my family .



4 commentaires pour ce devoir


Anonyme
Posté le 11 févr. 2010
Bonjour,
il y a quelques répétitions dans ton texte, mais bon, tu n'es qu'en 5ème, c'est donc difficile de connaître bcp de tournures différentes.
Pour dire ce qu'on possède: HAVE GOT ou HAVE (mais en 5ème, on apprend HAVE GOT donc il faudrait peut-être l'utiliser)


My room is big: I have got a double bed and a big desk. On my desk there is a laptop (= ordinateur portable), because I like chatting with my friends. I've also got a huge wardrobe with a mirror. I have (have got) a shelf for books and magazines and a bedside table to put my alarm clock. I have got a CD player. There is a carpet in my room. On the walls, there are posters showing famous singers, series and fashion, because I like these singers and series and I am fond of fashion. I have got pictures of my class and my family, because I love my friends and my family.
Anonyme
Posté le 11 févr. 2010
bonjour,

en français "corigement" n'existe pas, c'est correction!

My room is big. I have a queen-sized bed. On my big desk, there is my computer: I like to chat with my friends.
I need a great wardrobe for all my clothes. It has a mirror in it. I have shelves (plusieurs?) for books and magasines. Near my bed, there is a bedside table for my alam clock. I have a CD player. There is a carpet. There are posters on the walls about faschion, singers and TV series because I like it. I have pictures of my class (?), my family and my friends because I love them.

Voilà, j'ai corrigé les quelques fautes de grammaire et la syntaxe.
Je n'ai pas (trop) améliorer le niveau de langue:
tu utilises beaucoup "I have" et "there is".

Bon courage
Anonyme
Posté le 11 févr. 2010
c est tres bien apparemment tu comprends bien l' anglais
Anonyme
Posté le 11 févr. 2010
My room is big. I have a double bed and a big desk with a laptop on it because I enjoy chatting with my friends. I alsow have a warbrobe with a mirror and a shelf for all my books and magazines. Behind my bed, there is a bedside table to put my alarm clock. On the floor, there is a (red,blue..) carpet and on the walls, we can see many posters showing singers, series and fashion because these are my hobbies. In the other side of my room, I have a CD player and a place where I have my picture class and other pictures with my friends and my family because I love them alot.

Voilà, j'espère ne pas avoir fait de fautes et avoir pu t'aider.
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