Affiche contre les armes

Sujet du devoir

Hello :) ,

voilà je voulais , s'il vous plait, savoir si vous pouviez m'aider à corriger mon texte ?

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Hello :) ,

voilà je voulais , s'il vous plait, savoir si vous pouviez m'aider à corriger mon texte ?

This is a poster that shows the number of deaths by guns in some countries. We can see that the number of deaths by firearms is on average 50 to 600 times higher in America than in most countries.
The statistics are ghastly. Indeed, 17 people died in Finland against 9484 in the United States in one year. We also note that the police letters is bigger when it's a matter of the United States. On the bottom left hand corner we can see that it is a Brady Campaign poster.In the middle we also can see wrote God Bless America and a weapon with the colors of the American flag.
What strikes me the most is that many killings occurred in the USA because of the weapons (for example the one of Columbine or the one of Newton Elementary School on December the 14, 2012 which killed 27 people) :/ It's very appalling.
Unlike other countries where the sale of firearms is heavily regulated, in America this sale is free and people are entitled to free guns.This is enshrined in the Constitution. This poster militates in favour of the abolition of free movement of weapons in America.

Thanks a lot !