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A job occupies most of the time our daily paper. When we lose our employment, it is important to etablir and to keep a new occupation, a new everyday life(daily paper). A job search will take surment much time but it will not probably take all the place. Indeed, the chomage has an impact important on the family life. Already, it is necessary to speak about it to the family, their support is important and they can meme help us has to find a new employment(use). This evenement can also move closer and return a more solid family. Only, the unemployment have impacts on a couple. We can speak about quarrels, about separation when the spouse has no money and thus cannot feed or pay the rent. He can have strong tensions in a family, is in the couple or with the children. The children, partially the teenagers not apprecie no whom one of the parents is thus always at home. The teenagers are in a periode where they look for their own autonomy.
The chomage can also affect the social life. A man having lost his employment is going to be allowed go. It happens that the person becomes unsociable and not created more links with people because he’s most of the time in search of an emlpoi. Some persons are going to lose reflexes, reactions which they had before. But this can be positive. Being without emlpoi the individual can have more time(weather) for him, for his family but the lack of money and always there. An unemployed person can fast grow tired. He doesn’t make much his days and goes surment, after a while get discouraged.
In conclusion, the unemployment has all the same more points negative than positive. It stays especially, a source of conflicts

Où j'en suis dans mon devoir

Je suis en terminal ES et je doit préparer un exposer où la question est : How do you think unemployment today can affect family life and social life ? (Comment pensez-vous que le chômage peut aujourd'hui affecter la vie familiale et la vie sociale ? )
Je voudrais juste qu'on me dise mes erreurs de grammaire, mes fautes de conjugaison, d'orthographe .. Je vous remercie d'avance :-)