I LOVE SKIING

Publié le 2 juin 2012 il y a 11A par Anonyme - Fin › 9 juin 2012 dans 11A
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I'm going to speak about skiing.
I love skiing, it's my passion.
I skiingg at Grand-Bornand or La Cluzas, because it's not far from my home.
When my friends call me, to go skiing somewhere elese, no problem, I go it's Savoie, and I spend some time with them.
The only problem, I don't have any ski, so I have to rent ski near my place.
Thius winter season I was to the XGAMES with my friends; it's a competition of ski and snowbord; it's an event of legendary sports. It was really amazing.

I rarely skiing with my family, beacause I hate my brother, and my parents don't know how skiing.
When I skiing I feel free and relaxed, I love this sensation.
There isn't negative point, except when I fowl down, it's not very funny beacause it's hurt.
Tthe ski pakedg it's quite expensive, so some winter I don't have a lot of money, I don't pay it.
I prefer skiingg were there isn't tourist, bevause the tourist take a lot of place.



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Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Avec quelques corrections ---->
I'm going to speak about skiing.
I love skiing, it's my favorite sport, my passion.
I usually go to Grand-Bornand or La Cluzas, because it's not far from my home.
When my friends call me to go skiing somewhere else, no problem if it's in Savoie, and I spend some time with them.
The only problem is that I don't have any proper equipment, so I have to rent a pair of skis near my place.
This winter season I went to the XGAMES with my friends; it's a competition mixing ski and snowbord; it's a legendary event in winter sport. It was an amazing performance.
I go seldom skiing with my family, because I dislike my brother's company, and my parents don't know how to ski.
When sliding I feel free and relaxed, I love this sensation.
There isn't any negative point, except of course when I fall down : it's not very funny because it can really hurt.
The ski package is quite expensive, so it can happen that in some winters I don't have enough money to afford the expense.
I prefer skiing were there isn't too many tourists, because the crowd is really disturbing.
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Mercii ^^
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
J'aimerais rajoutée deux trois phrases:

I practice this sport since childhood, this is why I have facilitated a ski. As of today I don't really have time for me was devoted to sports and studies as the job leaves me more free time. "Maleureusement" last year I'm torn ligaments which did not fix my situation.
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
J'aimerais rajoutée deux trois phrases:

I practice this sport since childhood, this is why I have facilitated a ski. As of today I don't really have time for me was devoted to sports and studies as the job leaves me more free time. "Maleureusement" last year I'm torn ligaments which did not fix my situation.
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Pas compris ce qui est ( )
I practice this sport since my early childhood and this explains why I am so found of skiing. As of today I don't really have sufficient time to devote both to sport and studies (as the job leaves me more free time). Unfortunately, last year I tore a leg ligament and this did not (fix) improve my situation.
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
snowbord=snowboard
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012

I have been practising this sport since my early childhood and this is why I am so fond of skiing. As of today I haven't had have enough time to combine sport with my studies (as the workload I carry does not leave me enough time to do sport). In addition, last year I tore a ligament in my knee and it hasn't healed properly!
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
(as the job leaves me more free time) mon travail ne me laisse pas assez de temps libre. je pense que la phrases est juste.

Merci pour ton aide !
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Merci
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Merci
Anonyme
Posté le 2 juin 2012
Merci
Anonyme
Posté le 3 juin 2012
(as the job leaves me more free time) mon travail ne me laisse pas assez de temps libre. je pense que la phrases est juste.

Dans cette phrase tu dis le contraire, tu dis en anglais que ton travail te laisse beaucoup de temps. De plus, c'est work et pas job. Prends ce je que t'ai écrit, elle retraduit ta pensée d'origine.
Anonyme
Posté le 3 juin 2012
Dac, merci beaucoup

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