Oral anglais myths and heroes

Sujet du devoir

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I speak about the notion myths and heroes.

To begin with, I like to give a definition of the notion. A myth is a popular belief from a story that may or may not be true. A hero is a person of superhuman qualifies who is admired for his courage or extraordinary achievements

Why the myths and heroes are important in our society?
I delimited my presentation at 2 part, the first part is example of one myth and one hero, the second part is the explication why is famous.

I take for example of a myth, the American dream. The American dream is the notion that the American social, economic, and political system makes success possible for every individual. Many people criticize the idea of the American dream because they say that it is impossible for everyone to be able to fulfill their dreams

For example of a hero, I'm going to talking about Malala Yousafzai. Malala was born on 1997, she is Pakistanese. As a child she became an advocate for girl's education, which resulted in the Taliban issuing a death threat against her. After the Taliban began attacking girls' schools in Swat, Malala gave a speech on 2008 in Peshawar which is big city of Pakistan. On October 2012, a gunman shot Malala when she was traveling home from school. After been shot through the head, she should have died but she miraculously survived, and has continued to speak out on the importance of education. She was nominated for a Nobel Peace Prize in 2013. Then, in 2014, she was nominated again and won, becoming the youngest person to receive The Nobel Peace Prize. Malala is a young teen who is very mature. She could be considered as a real-life hero.

In my opinion the American dream was famous because lot of people take example such as Marilyn Monroe or Steeve Jobs who started from the bottom and are become rich and famous. They think when they go in the US, their lives will become better.
Malala Yousafzai, she is a hero because that she fought for girl's education. His speech gave in September 2008 is still celebrate today. Malala is unique, at age 17, she became the youngest person to receive the Nobel Peace Prize. It is an example for many people around the world.

In summary the myth and hero gives a good picture of a country or an example for his citizen. The American dreams gives hope at people, he gives a good image of the US. The hero like Malala Yousafzai is a person we can identify oneself. It restores hope and the motivation to fight even when it is difficult, to not give up.
To conclude, In my opinion myths and heroes was important for our society. Because they give hopes, they give motivation to not give up in her life. They give example for the people. We needs some hero like Malala to fight the inegalitie in the world. But they also need to myth as the American dream that show the importance of fighting for what we really want

With anything myth and heros, what would our world?