Oral d'anglais Idea of Progress

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To start with i'd like to give a definition of Idea of progress. The notion of progress refers to the social evolutions. There are many sorts of progress: economic, medical, political, social and technological. This progress allows then to improve the living conditions and the world. Nevertheless, the progress can have advantages and inconveniences.
In our society, the technology became an essential tool, allowing to realize incredible things, or not.
My presentation will deal with this question how does modern technology affect the today's society? Does it have a positive or a negative effect?

We will see first the new technologies improve the life social. Finally, the inconveniences of the technical progress.

To Start with, thanks to the development of new technologies the way of communicating populations of the world profoundly changed. The progress of Internet and smartphones transforms profoundly the habits of life and human relations.
Indeed, Internet allows to make many things; we can be at the other of the planet and be in touch with our close relations by networks social as Skype, Facebook, Whatsapp.
According to statistics of internet uses coming from the Internet Word Stat, realized in April, 2017, we count 3,81 billion Internet users, that is 51 % of the population. All that we make today is connected with Internet, because we find there absolutely (So, we buy and sell on the Internet, we travel, educates itself, we command meals, we play, and even love, thanks to the sites of meeting).
Finally, Internet thus allows to improve life of people, because about 75 % of the Internet users assert that their life is better thanks to Internet.
So, all elements, make of internet the tool the most used in our world.
In fact, thanks in technology and computers, we have now, people could work at home, It is what we can see with the case of Annie in the text “Does it suit everyone ?”. According to her, technology allows to be more productive “And even be more productive” l.14. And, it allows to be close to this family“ getting home so late at night that i never saw my family” l.10.
Furthermore, a virtual company it's too positive as regards the environment, because does not pollute, and do not depend on public transports in case there is a strike.
In the United States we consider at approximately 50 million people who use a computer to work at home. And your hcompany does not spend money on paying for a rent for brick.

Nevertheless, the telecommuting is a factor of isolation. Certainly, Internet facilitates the searches and the information exchange, but workers are not grouped in commonplace.

More and more people spend hours to be surfed to make esearches there, or "to discuss" with "friends" via the social networks, not to feel alone “"We want people to contact us," said Elise Cramer in the conference “Students Uplung”. "Without that, I think you feel lonely..”. l.63. Indeed, it is a negative vision because we depend only on the presence of other one.
Nevertheless, the "presence" of these virtual friends drives more easily an individual to isolate itself of real life. A study has revealed that 30 % of active people on the diverse social networks do not even know one of their neighbors.
Furthermore, the social isolation has direct impacts on the health “"I think these devices are addictive," said Gutlerne, l.78. According to a British study published in 2010, to spend too much only time would be also dangerous as to smoke 15 cigarettes not in the daytime.
Internet can have access to our private life, via the given personal, as the recent debate of Facebook concerning the personal data of 87 million subscribers, emptied by Cambridge Analytica for the benefit of the campaign of Donald Trump.

Furthermore, British series Black Mirror created by Charlie Brooker, who knew an international succés. Denounce the influence of new technologies on the people and questions the unexpected consequences that new technologies could have and how the latter influence his users.